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He is all I need

Dark alley
shadow valley
whispering wind
miasmal entwined
body...mind.

Deliquesce fear
assumptions dissapear
His presence near
equanimity sphere
whelmed relief.

He is all I need.

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  • xSarahx
    July 1

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    *blink* Sounds great! If I wasn't so tired I might look up what those words (miasmal, deliquesce, equanimity) mean to get a better understanding, but I've already made an excuse lol.
    HOWEVER, I did enjoy the rhyme scheme and the simplicity of the 10 line-2 stanza method that you used, followed by the wonderful one line closer(Those are my favourite). It's good to hear from you back in the AP world.
    Keep in touch!


    • brokenpoet
      July 2
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      Lol, it's not at all one of my better ones, but I'm glad you liked it, and I'm glad you read it! Thanks so much!