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i like the way i look in tight short dresses



oh adri

it is godawful

she is bed-rested with pregnancy and another child screams and runs and doesn't understand the magnitude
her husband is leaving her

and while i am sure it is not he who is all wrong, i will sure miss his voice and his guitar and his hand raised saying dear god and amen
but he is spiritually out there

he is tired and dead and too tired for a boy of twenty
and she is a mama and maybe a child too at moments

friend, i understand that i am weak and perverse and minute every time i answer your prompt with more letters but it is cancerous

i bought some shoes today
they are cheap and sexy and i feel they suit me quite stunningly and i have noticed that i like the way i look in tight short dresses

and i have noticed that it is always someone else i am trying to impress

and anyways, this is me being a coward
avoiding the reason why i will attend church on sunday

it is to hear him say goodbye
to wonder how his little blond woman will handle two tiny babies on her own
to wonder what happened between the night i happily watched them kiss and dance and eat cake and now
when he isn't in love
when she doesn't half mind

i think i will learn from their mistake and not get married
i think i will continue to wear tight short dresses and tall heels and hoop earrings and things

but i will be too ostentatious to love

i will be uneaten cake

 

-c.l.k

 

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  • adsaige
    July 30

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    C,

    I call you C because you are entitled to your privacy. And it is no longer impersonal if you know what it is I am saying and why it is being said. I fear having children. And hurting them and making them burying themselves in walls.

    They tire so easily and are to impressionistic.

    One day I might be uneaten cake to. I am not even lovely enough to be called cake.


    • zillion
      July 30
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      I must have children. I have this odd desire to take of someone for the rest of my life. Perhaps that is why I am a Social Work major. Perhaps that is why I want to die young.


  • acoustical
    July 2
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    ohh i love your last couple lines


  • sharptooth
    July 1

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    bought some shoes today
    they are cheap and sexy and i feel they suit me quite stunningly and i have noticed that i like the way i look in tight short dresses

    and i have noticed that it is always someone else i am trying to impress
    i really liked this line. because you start off talking about a husband leaving a pregnant wife and then about buying shoes. and it works well

    i like the "uneaten cake" reference, too.


  • notorious gold member
    June 30

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    "doesn't understand the magnitude"
    Jeeze. I totally forgot the magnitude the word 'magnitude' has in itself. I love it when amazing poets remind me there's an entire world of words I forget existed...

    "he is tired and dead and too tired for a boy of twenty
    and she is a mama and maybe a child too at moments"
    Such great characters insights...
    ...in 2 lines.

    "friend, i understand that i am weak and perverse and minute every time i answer your prompt with more letters but it is cancerous"
    !!!
    Every adjective here is perfect and fitted, like those dresses you describe later.

    "and i have noticed that it is always someone else i am trying to impress"
    My favorite line and insight here, fo sho.

    ;

    postscript: I always read your stuff and pretty much never comment. This equates to sin.


    • zillion
      July 1

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      I love words that have big meanings. That sounds stupid but I mean words like "magnitude", "immaculate", "eternity"....words that are almost too dramatic.

      I just learned of this situation last night. And perhaps it was the wine I was drinking or maybe the closeness of this couple that made them the subject of this letter.

      I kind of take on a persona when I write these leters to adsaige. That needy friend who writes only when there is a need to complain. And while everything in all the letters in 100% factual, I don't typically sound so clingy.

      Thank you for the input.

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