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Silent Plea

They dont know why she does it,
but everyone cares,
and when her scars show,
everyone scares.
Zipping up her hoodie,
pulling her sleeves down,
when people look her way,
she just turns around.
Everybody cares,
at least the ones who know,
their all so confused,
its to far from their know.
She cries and cuts deeper,
a small silent plea,
she feels all alone,
like no one understands,
so they care more,
and try to lend hands.
She thinks they dont care,
but they all do you see,
yet she cuts deeper and deeper,
just a silent plea...

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Meh.

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  • xeroabyss II
    July 7

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    Is it so silent, if others know?
    Only things unsaid and unseen are unknown.
    (in this world,you can not help those who do not wish to be helped)


  • Concrete Angel silver member
    July 2

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    If you're cutting I'll cut you! Cause you know I am always here to talk to and you don't have to hold it all in... and if it's not you then GOOD and if I ever catch you you're dead meat! Ok, that was just joking. If this is about someone you know you need to help them get help and quick!
    With that being said, this is a very good poem expressing the pain and sadness in a cutter's mind.
    The rhyme and flow moved along pretty well, but there were a couple places that kind of hiccuped that I think you could reword to make flow smoother. Then again... you could try rewriting without any rhyme. You should try free form some time it truly is a lot of fun!
    Great write lil sis!


    • UnicornSparkleVomit
      July 2
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      Hmph. I cant have a twisted sick mind to make this up? I shall answer none of your questions sir it would ruin my imagination. and as far as talking to you i do know that but i have opening up issues. and i freewrite alot im just in a rhyme phase. <3 love ya ♥

      • Concrete Angel silver member
        July 6
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        Well of course you can... where do you think you get your sick twisted mind from? Haven't you read any of my dark or horror writes? LOL
        We all have opening up issues... get over it jk... I know it sucks to open up...

        • UnicornSparkleVomit
          July 8
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          glad you understand. im a blonde now. not as light as i want it but still. cut my bangs. and are u going to WOF with me mom and torri on that special july 27 day aka national holiday aka my birthday? Because mom will need someone to hangout with while im with torri.
          love you lots.
          me

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