there were spiders on the windshields
weaving webs, so that
when we looked out our windows,
all we saw were lies
first and last, in between,
matters not, all is seen
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Diferent, and says so much with so little, i love the way you have out it, very interesting, and well penned:]
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power message within , but a strange tittle ..
keep sharing
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^^ that's because most of my poems don't have titles. only a few and only in necessity and i didn't know if i wanted to post anything without a title..thanks for commenting :]
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Welcome to Allpoetry
The alliteration in this is really well done. I felt that this ended too soon - as though it could have continued. Your words are definitely interesting. Webs mixed with lies - something many have said and done well.
I hope that you enjoy the site, and if you have any questions please don't hesitate to ask
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Good job, keep writing.
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
I love the way that this starts - the imagery of the beginning is fabulous the rhyme of the ending was nice touch!
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