Kind lady who my life has made complete,
Afford me this brief chance to share my soul.
That much o'erflowing soul that did entreat,
Heard then that plaintive, please makest me whole.
Young maiden fair whose hand didst once hold mine,
Responsive was I then to finger's clutch,
Of hand on hand and her so simple sign,
Wedding my heart to hers with gentle touch,
Longing to feel again that touch of hand,
Ere I forget that near forgotten day.
Yet even now I see a wedding band,
Imprinting on my heart that we won't stray.
Sufficient love we have for all this life,
Together for the ages man and wife.
Her sparkling eyes and face that glows so bright,
Emit a brightness none may dare to match.
Lo, like a shooting star's far reaching flight,
On high she soars so others cannot catch.
Virtue on her hangs like a mantle pure,
E'en more so when she holds me in her arms,
Offering me a love so tried and sure.
Forsaking this world's things and all its charms,
Methinks she loves me more than I can know.
Yet I may strive with all my earthly might,
Letting all my fierce love so clearly show,
I join with her and share in this delight.
For we are joined together, two are one,
Eternity for us has just begun.
Author notes
Wrote this for my wife of now 47 years.
In a list
A contest entry
- Double Sonnet Acrostics. Are You Up For The Challenge? by Onyx Dragon.
306 points, ended March 24, 2004, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Can You Feel The Love Tonight? by tawk.
425 points, ended February 11, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is such a beautiful tribute to your special someone. I so enjoyed reading it. Good luck in my contest
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This is a very nice tribute to your wife and I am familiar with acrostics and have written a couple,however they might have turned out. I never attempted the sonnet and am not too familiar with the form. Very interesting concept to me and I can tell this was penned from the heart. Beautiful and congrats~...
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contratulations on your win, well deserved
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This was so sweet and I felt and saw the love radiating from this beautiful write. You did it perfectly as well, followed all the rules and the form was perfection. You had awesome rhyme flow and meter. Beautiful job, and the best of luck. Congratulations on meeting the challenge
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Excellent!
Oh this is wonderful Paul! Wow, it's written so well! Love and marriage is such a beautiful thing, and you expressed it so well in this piece. My parents been married for 32 years now, and when I look upon them... I feel hopeful about knowing that I'll too be grounded in a long lasting future relationship. Well I truly adored this poem. Keep up the good writing and take care. -
Awesome piece Paul~and bravo to you for doing this style~
I was writing down the formula and almost hurt myself~
Beautiful tribute to your beautiful wife~
What a blessing~
Best wishes to you and this one looks like a winner to me~
Big hugs
and much love~Desire
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You've done well...very well old man. I don't even like sonnets that much.
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This is very touching...I love what it spells out..so sweet!
Excellent job here, and good luck in the contest!
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Five Star*****
Another beauty of a write...very poetic! If I wore a hat I'd take it off for you! A brilliant touching piece!
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You've outdone yourself on this one. It's a very beautiful, touching poem, and outlines all the reasons that I want to get married. The phrase you've chosen is a perfect summary of everything that went into the poem, and the rhyme is, as you often manage, just right. And can I please congratulate you on that ending?
Well done. The more difficult the challenge the more people surprise me on this site!
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Very beautiful my friend. If Marc were ever to write a poem for me it would probably sound like something from a German theology lecture! Good thing neither of us are too romantic.
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