love is beauty
love is pain
love is tears
upon your face
love is gentle
love is kind
love is this life
left behind
Author notes
it's short, and incomplete, I am still working on in, but this is what I have for now. Comments/ suggestions greatly appreciated :]
A contest entry
- Rhyme by XxNinjaNemoxX.
650 points, ended August 4, 63 entries
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Little Anguish
There is something screaming
The sadness bleeds on thru
I hope its only dreaming
And the reason is not you
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It's a great beginning, and the rhyme is good, but I agree with the comment below.
A great beginning none the less
Thanks for entering and best of luck
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nice start
4th line "upon your face" change to "falling like rain" now becomes meter and rhyme for two like stanzas. Beautiful either way, like to see it finished :]
love is passion
love is bold
love is something
you can hold...
this has great potential for much more, have fun with it!
Rick
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theres nothing to critisize about dis cuz this is da best piece ive ever read..really..it shows sadness..n emotions unexplained so deeply..bravo
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amazing and simple but massive impact
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lovely poem..you say it so well..love is so many different things...great write
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I really like it so far, i especialy like the first two lines.
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Great piece
A bautiful job, to the point with not much said. I love the first four lines it flowed beautifuly. Many blessings to you.
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