if i could tell the truth
remove them from the lies
i would be able to say to you
how trully i despise
the way you twitch your eye
or how you bite your lip
as i watch you shift your weight
moving from hip to hip
i miss the feeling
of all the kisses we had shared
and now it's true
that our love will never compair
but tis now in the past
and it has cought me unawares
so i sit here listening
to the tales you once had spun
yet now they have been shoved
like a wound covered with a glove
and now i shall never again
let my life depend
on the hopes
of budding love
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u can say what u want but truth be told i probs wont listen...
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i like the imagery- "the way you twitch your eye" etc,etc.
loves in the past...this is sad, but its capturing the picture of how their relationship is. i like this.
"like a wound covered with a glove"- my favorite line :]
nice write -
this was sooo pretty, but so sad
thx for entering
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wow............
good job...woot! ..is all I have to say...
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nice words. Also like the ryheam.
"To the tales you once had spun
Yet now now they have been shoved" Favorite part. Good luck and good job srry i wasnt able to appulad -
Heart Breakin'
Awe man this is such a heart breaking poem of yours I just read. it is so sad that you feel absolutely nothing but the voided emptiness in your heart and if I had to take a wild stab in the dark at the point to this poem I would have to say it was about you being broken up with and well now you are slowly leaking the bleeding that surrounds your shattered broken heart. Either way I look at it from this point of view: it hurts now and eby you postin' this poem you are taking the inicitive and moving forward and not lookin' back because in the end its your former lovers loss and your gain sometime again anyways brilliant well penned write and keep up the beautiful work
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