The yellow of the setting sun show the valleys dark
While the light upon the hillsides is like a glowing spark.
The olive green of gum trees, the dry grass on the ground
Sparkle with a golden glow the sunset spreads around.
Neighbors cattle fairly glisten in their black shiny skin,
Fluorescent in the fading glow dusk has invited in.
The shades of night will conquer, the daylight fade away
Heralding the closing of yet another brilliant day.
A contest entry
- Beauty is seen when we listen silently and watch it unfold... by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended July 13, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Beautifully written. I can see it all. A well deserved silver trophy!
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Thank you my friend. I wonder do I do justice to the beauty of it all; probably not. I can but try.
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It would be nice to see a sunset here at the moment. Can't see anything but the rain!
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Could you send us a couple of inches - please ?
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You can have it all!
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A truely beautful poem!
You really painted this poem, Bob. Reminds me of a painting by Constable. "...music in the trees, how their leaves are a chorus to a blue day." A wonderful line. I know it's in your notes not the poem. But it's good anyway! I like your take on the beauty of the simple things in life.
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Many thanks Bob. i am one of the lucky ones; I live in a rural area and by necessity i am out and about at the closing of the day. Ducks, chickens, dogs and cats all expect to be fed and secured for the night. Most times are pretty special but there is the time when the weather is lousy.
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Wonderful
This is an amazing write, very well done loved it.
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The closing of the day is always a special time for us. Our evening routine is to lock the chickens and ducks up safely from marauding foxes, feed our cats and dogs and,as it's winter now, stock up the firewood supply for the night. We see the changes brought about by the setting sun. Thank you for visiting and commenting, much appreciated.
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This is just so beautiful. The whole piece is so warming and gives one a feeling of peace which rings in every word you used. I love the part ...neighbours cattle fairly glisten in their black shiny skins. That immediately put i picture in my head of those cows out there. Brilliant in its delivery and another great write. I loved it.
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Good morning Lee, and thank you for dropping in and enjoying the view from my desk. I am blessed with a window looking across a paddock with black angus cows in it and a range of hills in the background. There is so many changes to the scenery with variations in sun,shade, birds and, of course, the movement of the cows. It is quite beautiful.
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What beauty you have written here, simple and so calm and lovely. Your ANotes were incredible too. A most enjoyable read.
Sheila
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Thank you Sheila, I appreciate your comment and thoughts. The AN was not mine, that was the prompt. I sit at a window where I write and have a magnificent view. The poem is my attempt to describe it.
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keep it coming i like it alot
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Thank you my friend, I shall do my best.
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Evocative...again
What to say, sensibly? I can well imagine an equivalent scenr -more especially as we have been having burning sun these last days, and long mellow evenings. No cattle here in Penge, tho'
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Thank you for your kind words my friend. One of the advantages of rural living is that there are farm animals about as well as the wild life. This makes for a pretty good lifestyle as long as you don't want to go to the opera, or a live stage show.
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Bob, you have truly captured the essence of natures beauty in your entry...with a bonus of author notes, beautiful as well...
I watch the sunrise as my pour my morning coffee...through my kitchen window, one of the reasons I live where I do...it's like saying hello to God...mary
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I do the same thing almost every morning, and in the evening that is about the time I go out and put chooks and ducks to bed. It's lovely when Mother gets her paints out, morning or evening. Thanks for your visit and kind words Mary, greatly appreciated.
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Very beautiful write
s Lately, I count myself lucky to witness a gorgeous sunrise or sunset and realize that I've taken such things for granted because they occured so often...
but for weeks now, rain has preceeded sunset and sunrise, cancelling both displays with clouds and fog. Of course, the sun emerges in betweento intercept dreariness but it's not as dramatic between noon and four
Thanks for sharing your sunsets
~Genie~
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Many thanks Genie, for your visit and comments. I live in a rural setting and when there is a sunset it's quite extroadinary. Like you though, we miss out when clouds and fog shut off the scenery and/or the colours.
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For a minute there I had to check that my Uncle Bob wrote this!! What a gem of a poem...such beauty in your words so poetically describing this valley. What timeless peaceful images came to mind. This is just gorgeous! Best of luck in the contest...Alby
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I am thoroughly mortified, of course I wrote this. Bit different from the usual, eh? My dear niece I am changing again. I write less volume now as my time is taken up with my book, but I think more about what I'm writing. Good ? or er - ah -um - not so good?
Joking aside all I can say is a profound thank you for popping in and leaving such a kind comment.
Uncle Bob
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I love this. The imagery is clear and wonderful!
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It's wonderful living out-of-town where the beauty can be seen every day and appreciated. Many thanks for dropping by my page, John, much appreciated.
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Bob
This is a mighty fine piece of writing. Though short ans simple in flows so well and paints such a grand picture. A true gem of a write.
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Many thanks Bob, I appreciate your regular visits and comments. This poem is short, I admit that, but sunset is short too. By the time I realise it would be a lovely photo - it's gone.
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Oh I so wanted to start singing the Australian National Anthem lol as I read this, describes the place I was born in so very well C
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Crikey, That was quick. I posted this to see how it would look and --- bingo.
Thank you for your comment, you have made my day complete. I have the good fortune to see this every day when I lookout the window.
Bob
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