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Giving It Up

I am leaving today
There isn't anything
I am leaving behind

I will take all of me
And leaving no memories
Take what you need
But please dont ask

Me to stay
I am Giving it up for you

I can take all the pain
And Misery
Just Let me be
I am still leaving

The times will fade
The scars will stay
I will take what I can
I am Giving it up for you

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Gosh, Horrible

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  • Poetic Obscenity
    July 4

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    That's deep and very relateable to many people I can assure you. You're a great writer and you have an intelligent way about you.
    You need a bit more adjectives to portray what you're trying to say without making it seem like any other poem on the face of the planet. Be original. Have your own style. Make is so that when I read your poetry, I don't need to see who wrote. I just know..
    =D

    But, You're are well on your way of blossoming into a beautiful writer.


    • Lorien
      July 8
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      Thank You, Dear
      I had a song stuck in my head XD
      I had to get it some how. So became this poem.
      I will work on my "voice"

  • MidnightBreeze
    June 29
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    i liked it but suicide is not the answer


    • Lorien
      June 30
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      I wasn't reffering to suicide, nor Am I suicidal.