When I look for love and laughter you're the giggle in my mind
You're the lucky silver sixpence that I'll never leave behind
You're the bacon in my butty you're the cherries in my scone
In the months since I first met you I have never been alone
When I'm bluer than the ocean you're the boat I want to see
You're a perfect South Sea island where I'll find my liberty
You are Laurel to my Hardy when I'm broken you're the glue
When there isn't any answer all I ever want is you
If my life's a game of tennis you're my backhand down the line
When I want a little tipple you're a glass of vintage wine
After dark you are the moonlight, in the daytime you're the sun
You're the looks that tease a lover and are always meant in fun
If I'm one of these in your life then you've given me my smile
If you say you want me near you I'll be with you for a while
There are stories all about me but just one can't be denied
Though my life has been a good one it is better by your side
Author notes
"butty" a regional, mainly Northern English, synonym for sandwich.
A contest entry
- Thank you, Carolyn by Sonja.
5000 points, ended July 17, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me honestly what you think, good or bad.
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Well, I have to say ...
that this is head and shoulders above most "love poems" I see here. I didn't have to grit my teeth reading it, which is a good thing. Not only that, but it's quite well done, as such things go, and remarkably easy to read.
All all, a good job.
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Perfection
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Delightful rhyme and I love the gyst of the poem!
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You make me to giggle and after your fine composed lines, I still can't wipe my big smile away. Just wonder who prepared you a cup of tea before you wrote it?
. Thank you.
~Sonja~
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I love the emotion in this piece. Thank you so much for this. Keep up the good work and good luck in both contests and all that you do!
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This reads through...
very well. It rolls for the reader and is straightforwardly understandable. Good write.
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A very sweet poem
Cherry xxx
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with an opening line like that, I expected a lot... and was not disappointed!
A wonderful ode to friend and lovers, that flies off the tongue like butter drips from a hot scone. [yummy!]
Write On!
jIM
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I miss writing poems in this sort of tone.. I find it very hard to do so anymore. Brilliant.
Let's think.. Brilliant, Amazing, Terrific, Excellent, Awesome.. that's all I can think of at the moment.. My point is that there are far from enough of these adjectives to cope with you.
My backhand is quite terrible a lot of the time.
I beat Dom last night. 6-2, 6-3, 6-2. He won the second set.
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A beautiful poem listing all the things a true friend should be. My pleasure was to read it.
All the best in the contest
Sue
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Now I know how you pronounce "scone"!
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You don't actually, I vacillate and about 66% of the time this poem is "wrong"
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I'm a 'scon' man =]
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A'body kens it's "skune" (a wee toon by Perth).
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One eats skines actually ...
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The first line grabbed me. So adorable!! This is such a sweet, darling poem. Fantastic. Great rhyme, rhythm and flow. You're a master! I live the European slangs as well; very fun for a somewhat cultured American. They're uncommon, but I understand them, and I enjoy them thoroughly. Excellent write!
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This is just delightful! I have one stupid question from across the pond: I certainly know what a scone is, but, I'm afraid not a butty. It's such a sweet and gentle love poem.
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I think its very good jeff you did a great job with the rhyme. Its a very sweet poem and you should do well in the contest.
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hehe! This is adorable! Penned in your signature extralongameter you have penned an assortment of rhyming smiles.
Love,
Amera♥
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Im sure it will be treasured
Good luck
Passionspromise
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I loved it
It was refreshing and quirky at the same time. It was sing songy yet soulful. Pretty nice.
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