I can finally see the sunset

i
she viewed life
as a key dipped in bubbled rust

sometimes
she mirrored her notion
and wore her hair down

ii
she wrapped colour blind
around her tongue
and licked the sunset
onto the evening sky

orange and blue embraced her
above and within

iii
her skin felt a sweet as fresh fruit
bathing in a pool of mid winter

and her eyes reflected the sky
as if she could almost
see through to the other side

Author notes

s i l v e r s c e n t

Image credit:I can finally see the sunset by iNeedChemicalX (click to view image)

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J Macabre
July 15

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I love this...i love how your words appear to be the womans thoughts in the photo...at least to me. Beautiful.
Odds and Ends
July 5

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i think that i'm addicted to your words.

i want to meet this girl. you have an enchanting way to lure in a reader and grasp them....

don't know what else to say but thank you. thank you for sharing your well placed words.
perfectsunset
July 3

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Visually gripping.

You've used the senses
very well, so that we can
truly taste, smell, see, touch
and hear the beauty your
piece expresses.

I really enjoyed this one
immensely. You are a very
talented writer.

Best wishes in the contest
Nangaleema
July 3

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and her eyes reflected the sky
as if she could almost
see through to the other side

i like that.
an intriguing rendering. your words caress the image.
apple cores.
June 29

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thank you

http:// ineedchemicalx.deviantart.com/art/I-can-finally-see-the-sunset-119878566

I had to put a space before the 'i' to post so just remove it and it'll be good.

tell me if you need another.