i know you like him but he has a girl i know i have my love i wish urs would show you are so kind i just can't see why. maby you just need some more time get out there so what is the guy doesn't come and blow u off your feet go blow him off his don't sit on the sidelines and waiting for him to ask just point out a guy and ask him to dance maby he will be sweat maby he will be a gerk but sweety if he is he just don't have a weath of ur time. maby he'll say yes and was just to shy to ask well baby girl if he says no thats just a loss for him you know me ill kick his ass. just stand up tall no tears worth at all so go ask another guy i know i bloomed already but to be truthful i bloomed to fast so take your time.
A contest entry
- For Those Who Have Not Blossomed by Swan song.
900 points, ended July 11, 13 entries
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some people need to open their eyes. ^.^& relise who i speak of and about threw this. someone dear to me has been trying to tell someone she likes them i think this shows if you read the comments. have an open mind to explore thanks for likeing my poem. cheers.
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This is very good advice i thank you for your entry
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I think you should edit this a bit you have quite a few errors. But, I love the message in this. :]
-- Tor
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i know who this message is for. and forgive my friend this is how she writes her poems and whatnot, and she can't spell!
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Ahh, there is nothing for me to forgive! I was just giving a little advice because you do have a really good piece here beyond the minor mistakes. :]
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oh i did'nt mean you forgive her i mean like sorry that my friend can't spell and stuff..... lol
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a wonderful show of talent penned here which grabs the reader by the hand and sparkles them into smiles of pleasure, admiration drips like honey from toasted waffles as i sit here and dream of poetry. thank you kindly for sharing.
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thank you.
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I think you should edit the profanity.
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no she shouldnt, i like it the way it is
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very good
GREAT poem congratulations that is very good -
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boooooooooooooo!
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