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When He Went, So Did She

She can not bare it anymore.
She feels..
Empty.
The one she loved and
cared for the most is gone.
He committed suicide.
She cries at night for him to come back
but he wont.
He is gone for good to the spirit world.
What can she do with out him?
She wont do anything.
She is just wasting away.
She wont eat anything
and is becoming ill.
She asks to herself,
How did this happen
and what to do next.
She wants to be with him again.
She wants to die too.
She grabs a knife
and starts to cry.
She starts to cut deep into her arm.
She sits there.
In the pain and blood
Tears running down her face
and into the cuts.
Then she does the final thing.
She slits her throat.
She leaves our world..
She killed herself alone
and hurt for her true love.
No one could have saved her now.
Only one who could have was him
but he was never heard from again.
He starved himself to death
and now she is gone with him.
No one loved them
but each other.
When he killed himself,
He killed part of her.
She has now finished
the last living part of her
and is now dead.
Alone in a cellar,
Where no one can find her rotting corpse
She said goodbye to her love when he died.
Now she said goodbye to the world.
And herself.
For ever.....

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  • wonderful
    i love the rotonly one wting corpse thing
    and how the only one who loved them was each other