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I wish I be a phoenix

I lay scattered before time helplessly
Which I see slipping away very slowly
from my unwilling hand gradually!

What should I call it? My inability?
Ignorance? Irresponsibility?
Weakness? Destiny?

Is that my failure to say my need?
Is that because I didn’t greed?
Is that because I didn’t plead?

Well, now I shout with my might
IF what I didn't do was alone right
I'll do them now to give a strong fight.

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  • dutch2lips gold member
    August 4
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    im sorry, your write confused me, the title and the poem seem unconnected in my unprofessional eyes
    thank you for entering