Though you said it ever
'It'll come, It'll come, '
Tomorrow came never.
Though you said it ever
as promises you made
though I believed it ever.
Though I believed it ever.
'It'll come, it'll come, '
Tomorrow came never.
Tomorrow came never.
Though I waited for it so long
though you said it ever.
Did you always lie?
Did you try to make me happy?
To say the truth did you feel shy?
Didn’t you know
Life's only a day's show
didn’t you know?
Did you also know
Only before and nothing's here after?
Did you also know?
Promises that you make
for tomorrows that you keep
are all illusive lies, is often a stake
Let me tell you now. Let me avow.
Only bygones recur, tomorrow never comes,
I have seen it ever and have known it til.. now.
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Interesting. I have seen it ever and have known it till.. now.
- The word "till" is used more commonly to refer to cash registers, I feel that "until" or even "'til" would be more appropriate.
- Are the two periods a typo or meant to form an ellipsis?
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Tomorrow may well never come but yesterday will always be forgotten better to live without regret than to die while feeling rotten.
Promises are never broken just the words that others have spoken
should love be true there is no doubt
about tomorrow we would never shout...
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Great poem! The only thing i didnt like was you used "Ever" alot. Other than that great job!
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The title is cliche which kinda gave way to the cliche in the poem. Rhyming never and forever made for some awkward english especially in the form (which was neat).
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I really enjoy the structure of this poem as well as the theme ( the truth of which becomes all to clear to us as we get older). Best Stanza for me
Didn't you know
life's only a day's show
Didn't you know
Wow!
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woaw I love your perspective on the prompt. please can you put "Fork issues" in your Author notes
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