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A fair judgement

I entered winter once again
But this time shall be the last
My final confrontation with the past

Decrepit body's lay beneath the icy surface
Fulfilling their final purpose
To remind he whoever passes here
That so shall his

A thousand corpses well preserved
Of those condemned from birth
And although they came from all corners of the earth
One thing they shared, and one thing alone
They had an ending, well deserved

And now I too shall meet this fate
For living my live in seething hate
And I too came here to clean the slate
For this icy hell, is where final judgment is received
A place where the gods debate

Terrified to my very soul, the final steps I now take
And there sat a terrible creature, spawned forth from the frozen lake
It let out a screeching howl, and a devastating rake
And shred me to pieces, as They had decided
It did not take Them long to decide my sake

And so I too, had an ending well deserved

And yet again, a fair judgment was served

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This is what came to me when I saw the picture.

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  • its a very good write, very dark to me ... not positive if that's what it's supposed to be but alas I like it!

  • Profound...

    The soul of the author of "A fair judgement" has matured in wisdom to be at least a trillion years old ~ if that could be measured.

    Very intriguing composition and contents dealt.

    Much gratitude to the author for sharing "A fair judgement".

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU

  • Bob Fox
    July 2

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    My

    Poet a terrific poem about self-loathing. But also such a sad state of affiars. It seems a gripping depression has captured your soul. But write on.

  • A mind blowing piece of art, and not just a poetry, it is a picture of judgment and fate. the imagery is very well crafted and the whole development is so organized. I could look into the whole situation, and it took me in for a moment that-
    "And although they came from all corners of the earth
    One thing they shared, and one thing alone
    They had an ending, well deserved"- my fate will be no different.
    Very thought provoking poem, and great pleasure to rea

  • chinchu04
    July 1
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    beautiful

    this poem is the most beautiful poem i have ever read.


  • ScarsFade
    July 1

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    WOW what an icey chilling picture you gave here this was intense and i throuhgly enjoyed reading this it kept me on edge the entire poem, you have a gift for the mental image.Please keep writing your talent is such a gift..much <3....scars.


  • myrataal silver member
    June 30

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    Wow.

    And so it goes, and so it goes.

    Soul, see thy words and repent thy sins. And die no more.



    You wrote a dramatic verse. I loved this.
    Myra


  • Frogzter gold member
    June 29
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    Great take on the prompt... chilling! Thanks so much for entering and best wishes,

    Frogz~

  • jadeangyal
    June 29

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    Reminds me of the dead marshes from the Lord of the Rings. Eerie, chilling.
    To remind he whoever passes here
    That so shall his

    Cool lines, and so final.

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