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Sea Lost Voices

Above
the rolling acres of blue,
Mists
ghost white and haunting
Echo
the liquid strained voices of ships
Slowly
losing their grip on reality
Amidst
the salt stains of so many
other
blue lost voices,
Too smudged by fog,
to hear their cries

A contest entry

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  • Rose-Quartz
    July 1
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    Hello Darkend, Thankyou for your very helpful comments on the 'to's in my poem. I've altered it now, I think that's what you said to do, if it isn't could you be kind enough to let me know. I'm having one of 'those days' lol. so I'm not sure if I've corrected it properly. Thankyou also for your lovely comments, you've made my day Take care of yourself. Love & my very best wishes from Rose xxx for you xx
    ps. I love your work too. x

  • Rose-Quartz
    July 1
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    Hello Sandy, It's lovely to hear from you. I do appreciate your kind words on my poem. I hope you are keeping well. Take care. With love&my very best wishes from Rose xxx for you x

  • Rose-Quartz
    July 1
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    Hello Gaylene, Thank you for your very kind words on my poem. Thankyou also for holding the contest that inspired me to write it. Take care of yourself. With love & my very best wishes from Rose xxx for you x

  • Rose-Quartz
    July 1
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    Hello maralisa, Thankyou very much for kind words on my poem. Your hug is much appreciated. Take care of yourself. Love&Best Wishes from Rose xxx


  • Darkend
    July 1

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    Enchanting...i love the rhythm and beauty of this poem. The only thing i would change is the "to" in the second to last line to "too". Take Care and keep writing. I love your work!


  • Sandygram
    June 30

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    Wonderful Poem!

    What lovely imagery you have pennned within this poem. So lovely! A pleasure to read. Take care, Sandy


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    June 30

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    A lovely write on the prompt. It solunded like the sirens luring the sailors away. Beautiful. Thank you for your entry
    Gaylene

  • Rose-Quartz
    June 29
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    Hello Starz, Thankyou so much for your very kind words on my poem. I hope you are well and that you have a lovely week too. Take care of yourself. With all love and my very best wishes from Rose xxx for you xx


  • maralisa silver member
    June 29
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    aw a beautiful write good luck inthe contest maralisa

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    June 29

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    This is a nice piece for the prompt best to you in the contest have a lovely week be well

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