Summer rested, bare
Upon the well baked fields
As dawn dressed the sky in shades
Of crimson silk
Droplets of dew
Formed from her compassion for the dry earth
Fell in thoughtful tears
That transformed to rise in flight
As they touched the world
Ragged lacewings
Brushstrokes of blue beauty
Rose from the depths of indigo sown fields
Thoughts scribed in ebony ink
Gave structure to ethereal wings
Twirling with creative style
Upon the sweet fragrance of the new day
Artistic in their clever design,
Alighting for just a pleasant moment,
They tasted the sweet nectar of the indigo flower
In a relationship sustained through time
As the day turned diligently towards night
Grey clouds shyly threaded
Their generous promise of rain
A trustworthy weaving
Through the calm white drifts
Still adorning the open sky
Sapphire dipped wings tumbled,
An articulate blue rain falling
To brush whispers of love
Over gentle curves of ivory skin
Lacewings,
Engaging in friendly conversation
With parchment skin
Laid their wings side by side
Folding shimmering warmth
Around her quiet form
Colours melting
In the haze of early dusk
They coated her in generous layers
Blue painted cloth
Stitched with silken words in hues of black
That spoke wisdom to imagination
Cloaked in blue she stood,
Reaching for the strength of life internal
She became Autumn
And her humour mingled
With the passionate wind
Of the new season’s storm
Author notes
This was written using a word bank of positive attributes.
wellbaked,compassion,thoughtful,beauty,depth,ethereal,creative,style,sweet,artistic,clever,pleasant,sustained relationship,diligent,shy,generous,trustworthy,calm,open,articulate,love,gentle,engaging in conversation,friendly,warmth,generous,wisdom,imagination,strength,internal life,humour,passionate,mother
A contest entry
- Go DEEP. by Xxpoison.kissesxX.
1300 points, ended July 7, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice work.
You are very Skilled in Things i hope to improve on Ima add you 8 )
lol
keep it up inspire me!
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Imagery! This is such a magnificent poem. The words you chose were very strong and the poem was properly developed. Good luck in the contest.
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Awesome
I've written on other poetry sites, collaborations about Gaia (Mother Nature) as a theme...this is absolutely beautiful...the choice of words, very intelligently written...beautiful! beautiful! beautiful! Thank you so much for sharing...smile...David
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lovely images portrayed yet for me there is just a tad too much wording in this... for example:-
Artistic in their clever design,
Losing the word clever does not detract but in my opinion its omission helps better understanding. -
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Thanks for your comments and I agree, I wasn't all that happy with that line. With such a large word bank it was difficult to fit some of the words in. I'll definitely have a look at changing that line.
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What imagery this has!!
I was wound up in your words that painted this amazing picture. You do paint well with words. I did think that there were areas in which you could shorten the writing, but if this is your style, so be it.
I enjoyed it nonetheless. Thank you. -
the playing of colors are so amazing. that's true for mother of life. salut!
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Very beautiful imagery, and nature is the obvious inspiration here, Very nicely written
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nice imagery, right off the bat. makes me wish I was up at sunrise (I will have to make a point tomorrow). was 'humour' in the word bank? Because you spelled colours without the 'u'...a strange mix in style.
The language is interesting; it floats and paints in light strokes.
It is the image you created in my mind that I like best...it's very serene. I wish you luck in the contest!
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Thanks for your comments and for pointing out the spelling. Yes humour was in the word bank, I'll add the words to my notes.
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