Rip away the sanity that is left
Choke her until the whites of her eyes turn charcoal black.
Push and shove
And hurt some more
The feeling she harbors beneath her skin
She will blame you for the reason she commits to sin.
Poke and prod
And take some more
Leave her alone
She doesn't want you anymore.
With kisses that sting
And hugs that suffocate
She is intoxicated by your poisonous gas.
Your holding her back with chains of brass.
With what you do
And everything you say
Leaves her more and more astray.
With your dark hatred filled eyes
And your cold maggot infested heart
You force her into your murder-go-round.
What did she do
For you to go into the blackened void of self pity.
That which you force on her to feel itty-bitty.
Just walk away
Like everyone else
And let her escape your dark ballet.
But no, not you.
You hang around
Making her suffer
Telling her it'll make her tougher.
All you're doing is killing her more
Shoving pain and angony down her throat.
Just leave her be
Let her roam what she wishes was free.
Why won't you just let go
Just disappear and hide forever.
Let her get back up
Let her take the hand of someone new
Let her start to mend the wound.
Author notes
6-29-09
A contest entry
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Wow. This is very raw and emotional. I believe that this is a poem that many can relate to in their own way. It's sometimes a very sad world we live in, many people have to go through horrible things that they in no way deserve to deal with. Though if they make it through and get out of that situation, you could sometimes say they are stronger for what they have lived through in their life.
You have an amazing piece here, please continue writing!
Grace.
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... ouchies
yeah thats a bit ... sad -
Sad piece but really well done i thort of a friend of mine when i read this .. too often people hang in there just not letting the other get on with life even tho they are done with them its cruel hey great work here indeed
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love it
nice makes me wanna cry.
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oops!
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Wow
Powerful write my poet friend maybe a minor change with:
What did she do
For you to go into the blackened void of self pity.
That which you force on to her already.
jus a suggestion
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AMAZING!!!
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Sometimes there is no escape of that "dark ballet" sometimes it is just there and will be forever. You did a good job on this piece I really enjoyed it . Thank you for sharing.
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I like this.
Its awesome. It goes well together to.
"Just walk away
Like everyone else
And let her escape your dark ballet.
But no, not you.
You hang around
Making her suffer
Telling her it'll make her tougher." -Awesome, really.
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Oh ... OHhhh, this one feels like you were writing it with me in mind
lol, I like it though, catchy, and hell, it kept my attention, so thats got to be a plus there, And yes, Tell my ex to go fucking die jkjk, unless he's reading my comments
which could be a possibility... lmao.
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