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Blinded By Love

Make Love, feel my heat, my soul set ablaze
Passion bestows the flames burning inside
Gasping, my eyes now locked into your gaze
While each and every command I abide
My mind in a whirlwind, heart in a daze
Engulfed by your touch, alas I can't hide
Breathing increases, I'm about to scream
Pinch me and tell me this isn't a dream

You've taken my sense, left me in a craze
Washing me over like that of high tide
Shining as brightly as morning sun rays
Together, lost on the ultimate ride
Upon my tender heartstrings your love plays
Recovering all of the tears I cried
Taking our Love swiftly to the extreme
Along with the mornings first early gleam

In his beating heart is where our love stays
Overflowing with adornment and pride
Growing and changing in so many ways
We push our differences off to the side
For being his father I give you praise
Knowing you will be his ultimate guide
The combustion of love causing much steam
Blinded by the strength of love's only beam

Author notes

Ottava Rima

A Ottava Rima is a poem written in 8-line octives. Each line is of a 10 or 11 syllable count in the following rhyme:

one octive poem. abababcc
two octive poem. abababcc, dededeff
three octive poem. abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii

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  • Swangrnv gold member
    June 30
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    sweetly penned

    now this is what i was expecting..another strong writer, thank you for being what i hoped..

  • StonerChica
    June 30
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    aaw now i miss bein in love


  • Amera gold member
    June 29

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    This is wonderful Sara! Penning a love poem with a Rima adds so much depth to the emotion. You have written the form perfectly and so made it a joy to read and recite.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • glenn shannon silver member
    June 29

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    damn lovely piece of otava Rima i new that all along NOT but i know its a fine poem and thats what matters the most cheers


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    June 29

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    aee this is such a lovly tender sweet lovin write from ya Bluey I really love the warmth that radiates from this write and also the passion that is abound through out this poem of yours. the new poem style is incredible and I really love it anyways this is just a really well penned awesome poem from ya ad keep up the marvelous work.

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