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Dear Mother,

Dear Mother,

There is, no more that I can give to you
That I haven't already given, or tried to give
I guess My love, was not loving enough
Or maybe, it was too much and I smothered you
My heart, was not pure enough
I'm sorry, I could not stay a little girl

It's been so long since we've spoken,
When I try to call, I still find myself emotionally broken
The images flow back, things I wish would fade to black
A little girl, trying to ineffectively to please you
Nothing could ever measure up,
A teenager trying to find my own way
Havoc upon my intentions you love to play

I still remember down to the very day,
When it occurred to me, that I stayed with you
Because I was afraid of no one finding me good enough
Just like you always told me they would
Thanks for nothing, thanks for nothing good

I can lay blame upon you for many things
Many wounds that are left raw, you have inflicted
Many crimes you deny, yet find yourself convicted
I cannot call myself blameless, shameless
It sometimes went hand in hand
But when the final judgment comes
You are left throwing the sand

I find myself loath for words here,
For how can you put decades,
Of fear and pain, lies and denial
Into one single letter,
With words lined up in single file?

There is, nothing more that I can say to you
Not I love you, not I hate you, not even indifference
I've said my peace, I've paid the price, accept this penitence
I'm sorry that I can no longer allow you to hurt me,
That I've lost my ignorance

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  • the charmed one
    September 20

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    wow this letter realy blow me away because iam going through some things with my mum too . there is saying mother is god in child eyes.. when that is taken away what becomes of you ? its hurtful thing when mother hurts its worse than anything i totaly understand i have been there . it must have been not easy for you to share this but thank you there is many people out there who could relate to this .overeal its amazing heartfelt letter


  • MusicMattnessLives
    September 17

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    I can relate. They say mother's love is the best, but her abuse is the worst. Whether it be intentional or not. It's easy to forgive, impossible to forget. You've done a great job releasing your emotions. There is something about this piece that makes me think. Great write and good luck. With more than this contest. With life.

    Matt


  • Mister Mattia
    July 30

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    Dear you,

    I am sorry that you feel this way about your mother. To me, a mother should be one that is kind and respectful...not treat you like this. I wish you had the love my mother showered upon me. It's the kind of love to share with the world, you know? I could only wish that for you.

    Best of luck in life,
    M.


  • cazzy71
    July 25
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    Sadness

    Sadness is evident,open to view by all that read this powerful,gut wrenching poem.


  • xSarahx
    July 8

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    Heavy duty

    Again, HOLY!
    I can hear it and see it. You are extremely talented. Great job. Keep writing, the world needs to hear you!

  • cazzy71
    July 2

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    Extreme voice

    The power this write conveyed was chilling.It is almost like you are reading it aloud to me,the passion is so real,so true,so raw.Thank you for taking an interst in my contest.I will definitely view other work you have on this site.


  • Odds and Ends
    July 1

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    it's hard to critique a letter like this to someone's mom.

    hmmm. As far as the letter goes, I cannot deny that you portray strong emotions and create this bond with your audience. The majority of them can probably relate in one way or another. I know I could.

    As far as poetry goes. Because there is such a HUGE amount of emotion, that leads to a HUGE voice. You played with words in a few areas. I just think that voice is quieted a bit by unneeded words. That's just my opinion though.

    I did enjoy the emotion and I did connect to this piece. Thank you for a good read.


  • Allyson.Lashae.
    June 29
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    This was good! and very sad at the same time! It would be so hard to go through life constantly wondering how to please a parent. This poem is great though, full of emotion and truth, and heart wrenching sadness! Great write and best of luck to you in the contest!


  • Silences Voice
    June 29

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    Thank you for the entry

    Very nice. Very powerful. I like it. It had a certain emotional presence that cannot be surpassed. Very very good.

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