Alex sat there
just staring with blind eye
into the perpetual darkness
creatures of all kinds moving about without a purpose.
sitting next to her
a lone knight
clad in shining silver
black beady eyes flash red crimson
the heat of his touch
sliced open her tender flesh
made her feel as if she were reborn
cast into the world where her other half reigned supreme
This queen
dressed in stardust
a figure of what she is inside
the demoness to her angel
she let her silver knight fall to his knees
and he hit the floor with a bloody splash
the satin wept blood red tears
as her head hit the cashmere couch
When they entered the room they found her dead
a note in her hand
a knife on the floor
and it read:
"Please forgive my silver knight,
his blade was much to sharp.
Please forgive my naughty side,
her crown had too many thorns.
Please forgive my satin dress,
her pull was far to weak.
Please forgive me,
for seeing them as they really were,
Human."
Author notes
Naughty
Knife
Faith
Those were the three words I chose and i hope that you can identify them because I believe when you personify something you never really have to say what they are 
A contest entry
- Personification by cybilseyes.
550 points, ended June 29, 12 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Very graphic, I can almost imagine whats going on, nice flow and creativity!! Two thumbs up!
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I love it!!!!!!!
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AMAZING!
NIOCE i love your work. very graphic. gothic. full of love and tragaty.
keep it up
poet homie,
TWiZTiD FaTMaN! -
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thank you, i really appreciate it
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you definately filled the bill with your buzz words, naughty, knife, faith...
I don't know whether to run or kneel and pray?!
I'll let you know how it works out for me...
KP
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Thanks so much for your entry I really enjoyed reading it, It definitely kept my attention which is a hard thing to do first thing in the morning! Best of luck!
Cyb -
I really like this, especially your ending stanza. I might suggest taking out the word "as" in either the second or fourth line of the fifth stanza, as it does repeat and interrupt the flow a little. Well done, I enjoyed this!
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Well, I dug the poem, but it's very very hard to pull off making an object scary with personification. I found the knife humorous, especially because of the beady eyes... it came off as cartoonish. Just being honest.
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Cool poem(:
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The ending stanza was the best one in the write! I really liked it!
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