As I run towards you,
I wipe away my tears.
Finally you're here.
I wrap my arms around you,
Not giving you a second to speak.
This is my moment.
I break free from the lock,
And put my finger to your mouth.
"Don't say a word, before I say mine.."
I look at you,
Look deep in your eyes.
"I love you
& If you go and marry her,
You'll break my heart..
When you left for this country,
All I did was think about you,
About us.
And the thought of you risking your life,
Was devastating.
I realized now,
How much I really love you.
I can never be without you..
Ever."
I let my tears drip,
As I fear for your reply.
You look at me,
And wipe away my tears,
And say
"Such perfect words"
You look at me,
Deep into my eyes.
You look at my lips,
As I look at yours.
I come closer,
You come closer.
I tilt my head,
As you tilt yours.
And we kiss,
As it starts to rain.
Your lips still stick with mine,
And I do not move.
The rain falls upon me,
And drips down my body.
I remove my lips,
And whisper
"I guess real hero's can be saved"
A contest entry
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You know me, Im completly crazy about love between one person in the military and one in the real life.
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Awww such an amazing ending! Vivid write!
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I like this poem. It's very detailed.
Great job hun!
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Thank you for reading and commenting on If I Tell Her How I Feel. I read this poem. In my opinion, very abstract. Makes you picture the scene. I like it. keep it up.
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wow
i have a friend who is going through the same thing. i love it. xoxoxo -
This is so beautifully written. I think the kissing in the rain is a bit cliche, but cliche is nice in some cases =]
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damn - one masterpiece of a poem.. is this a real story? if it is then it's a really good one.. really nice!
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This is so very sweet. Romance gets me every single time. You are a brilliant poet.
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I really liked this. it was beautiful and it made me smile. I felt better as Iread this.
keep up the good work! thanks for entering our contest and good luck!
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Very Very nice
This is definately one of your best pieces. It sounds very good and means so much. You couldnt said it better. My favorite part is And we kiess, As it starts to rain. Your lips still stick with mine, And I do not move. The rain falls upon me, And drips down my body. I remove my lips, And whisper "I guess real hero's can be saved"
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i love it!!
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very interesting piece. shows real feelings. go u
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i love it! what more can i say?
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I loved this it was absoultly awesome a great poem keep on writing
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A lovely and captivating write ! Very
well crafted !! I love happy endings ..
Thank you for sharing , my pleasure
indeed , to read ..
Best wishes , Friend Easy
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aw, so beautiful, it really filled me with emotions
the last line was so perfect
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Amazing
I love the tone and the rhythm of the poem, it also has very nice imagery. I think that everyone can need a hero at some point in time of their life and this just clarified my thoughts. Another good job! -
O.o I Like This one
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wow. this was really beautiful! i loved it! WOW! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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Very sweet, I loved it If only we could all have this but alas it is not to be. Great write, thanks for sharing
~ KK
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WOW!!!!! that was fantastic well done! flowed really well I love it at the end "I guess real heros can be saved"
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AWWWW!!! this is so cute!!!! i love it!!! its BEAUTIFUL!!! *smiley*
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love it. if it were a movie it would be my favorite. ah, love stories <3
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I'm glad you got your man Keep writing!
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