Point Blank 1: Your laugh was a drug while I'm driving at the wheel
There were moments when we would talk
That my heart would forget to beat
And I would giggle under my breath
And feel this warmth from my head to my feet
And you would laugh and I'd join in some more
Two heartbeats dancing to the sound of fun
But I was silly, and seemingly blind
I didn't care you really wanted to run
Point Blank 2: You blind-sided me like I was standing in your rear-view mirror
Words of comfort flew forth from my lips
Like sweet movements of legs or hips
and I didn't take notice or mind
that you always kept your responses hidden behind
and somewhere between your hellos and goodbyes
I lost time to figure out your lies
And it turns out in the end
Your smile was a little less than pretend
Point Blank 3: Objects in the mirror are closer than they appear
Insecurities are just an excuse to pull away
at the small fact that you don't want to call me pretty back
sometimes it takes a look back to remember that
I'm not every other girl who's never cut you slack
Maybe I'm crazy, high on the drug that is you
Or perhaps I'm just stupid, but truth is I don't really care
And I want to be with you whether or not you think I can
But just remember, I am really am still standing there
Point Blank 4: The way you lied was like poetry on my dashboard
It's funny how one moment, that really, we could be laughing
and the next I'm finding you think we're a lost cause
but you don't tell me through your own lips
in fact you've no idea I've got a clue
that I'm smarter than you want me to be
and that I'm a little less than happy
And that I don't want to remember when I wake up
that you're just a wonderful liar
and that I'm a silly girl who laughs away
but never seems to forget that her smiles and giggles
Are just as fake now as your's have been
From the very start
Author notes
Keni Fishel/16
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Comments
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Oh my. This was absolutely breathtaking.
Well!
What a creative format!! It definitely accented the poem in a strange but quite enjoyable way! I also relished the rhyme scheme in the second stanza; it's very common, yet you seemed to give it an extra spark. Although I typically find break-up poems very tedious, I was drawn in by this work!! Gosh Keni, I LOVED IT!!!
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The chicken soup you presented was watery but good. Has any one told you you shouldn't eat while driving? Oh well,as life things come and go nothing will last forever no not bad relationships nor crushes. Ya...thats about all the words I have split on this. Really I forgot what i was doing here...but at least i read something while semi distracted.


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Wow this is a really good poem. Excellent in facto. Total chicken soup-esque





