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Creme Soda

We could all die tomorrow
In a nuclear apocalypse
And you tell me not to worry?

I will not blindly follow
But I probably won't resist
If you swear that they won't hurt me.

Unreal and fully hollow
We blame the experience
but we really just stopped learning..

Who was I playing again?
What was I saying again?
creme soda
lemonade

Author notes

u g l i e j o s h

A contest entry

How bad does it suck?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments

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  • JToddUnderhill
    November 12
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    Depth.....

    ..... but then returning to innocence at the end, I liked it. This was beautiful!


  • Ami
    October 19

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    Wow congrats on the gold trophy that you have so far for this great write great imaginary now I want a creme soda lol
    Thank you so much for entering my contest and Good luck
    -♥Amy♥


  • XXxXBassMeisterxXxX
    July 1
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    you amaze me... great write and great job on gold


  • crivanea silver member
    July 1
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    Intersting piece! Congrat on the gold


  • SizzyFid
    June 29

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    This is tasty, and wonderful.
    I kind of want to take your words and kiss them.

    Your title intruiged me right away, and the piece is both deep and blunt. =P

    "I will not blindly follow
    But I probably won't resist"
    I absolutely adore these lines. I love wordplay and picking apart common sayings, which you did very well here.

    Very individual. You had me hooked and smiling right up until your last word.

    Yes, I definately would like to see you go to the next round. You made the finalists.Congrats x


  • Best-to-the-Fall
    June 28

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    How bad does WHAT suck?!!!

    what a perfectly wonderful write... i wish i could hang this up somewhere. gosh! I don't know why you ask if this sucks because this is just. wow.

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