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Souvenirs

Missing image
Moon to Sun~
light shifts loyalties;
a plum beam peels the mist
off winter's face.

It hangs on the shoreline
and fresh dew drips
from the days' linen.

On this soundscape
of seagulls, salt
and the lighthouse...
we rolled up memories
and stars
from the lost night
on the beach.

Remember
that long walk home?
Our footprints in conversation,
punctuated by sand;
collecting coins of sunlight
from 'neath the leafy trees.


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inder

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  • Peteskid gold member
    July 12

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    a delightful story, the imagery shows the scene and the precous way time can be, in memory, very well done...PK


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    July 10
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    Beautiful images poetically written. Love the "coins of sunlight".


  • liquidmindforever
    July 2

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    Our footprints in coversation
    Dear Poet,
    In the above, I wonder if you meant "conversation" or the play of footprints covering one another?
    Also, you need to go back to the rules, there is something needed in the Author's Notes.
    The prompt is from WB YEATS poem "statues"
    Your poem is lovely; will you please point me to your take on the prompt; apparently, I'm missing it in between such loveliness.
    Thank you for entering my contest: "Empty eyeballs know that knowledge increases unreality, that mirror on mirror mirrored is all the show."
    When you've designated the author note
    quote please im with title of poem and contest.
    until then
    best wishes
    and stay
    liquid


    • inder silver member
      July 2
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      apology

      I apologise...I realised the same missing point and withdrew the poem...appreciate the kind comment...kindly pardon the unintended inconvenience caused.


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    July 1

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    The best kind of souvenirs are those you have so beautifully portrayed in this poem..wonderfully written.


    • inder silver member
      July 2
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      Thank You Linda

      So kind to have dropped by to read and comment, look forward to more interactions!

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    June 28

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    A very lovely write s You definately put just the right amount of awesome imgery in here to evoke a wealth of emotion.

    s and best wishes always... Genie


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 28

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    "Our footprints in coversation,
    punctuated by sand"

    .. like walking a love letter along the beach. beautiful scenes you've painted here, inder...the kind of souvenirs that stays in the mind and the waves can't wash away.

    ~ Nicolette

    • inder silver member
      June 28
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      gracias!

      got a few more in the waiting,...I know you will find the time Nic!

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