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to the mouth of a river's song

"I have wandered these hills, found a sound in every valley and on each high peak. Among the snow, in the dull ache of summer heat. A hawk cried, eagle soared and somewhere a wolf told me he was there. Tiptoed deer passed me with acknowledgement in soft brown eyes. If I stay still, hear the noises of the deep woods; music in the trees, how their leaves are a chorus to a blue day. I can find the blessings again, so long ago lost by pavements and city walls. For here, in the heart of the country, I find myself young again, in love perhaps for the first time in my life, I can see the beauty at my fingertips and inside your eyes."

 

i still search for home

following flowers, simple scents

and that voice in the wilderness

 

it often sounds like yours,

if i remember its assonance

as clearly as the lilac's i saw

 

and were they mine

as you once were,

small yet strong in their youth,

a tiny bloom, stretching to grow

 

i dipped toes in clear rivers,

spent time following bends

just to find a mouth, the gentle endings

where the whisper roared

 

saw lakes born of a woman's touch

sacred lands and birds of mystery and air

i wondered if i'd seen them at all

spending more time in your eyes

than glaring at a turbulent moon

or a selfless sun

 

we bore love in this hallowed place

with a crown of soft feathers

wanting a chance to soar 

above the grim dark soil that held us firm

a reality we knew would never change

 

i wanted crystals and fine yellow fields

expanses of empty woods, containing you

 

when the fulfilment of everything i called beautiful

was only when i saw you look at me

 

and the teardrop fall

 

 

 

 

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Well I said I'd finish it one day, what better than to do it while the contest was on. lol

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  • inder silver member
    June 29

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    what a canvas

    every inch of space is in a vibrant hue. you paint it all so well and then pour the universe in a teardrop with effortless ease and elan!


  • adsaige
    June 28

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    "music in the tree's"
    ^remove the apostrophe.

    I am not sure what to say as this is a rather beautiful poem/prose piece. I would have liked to see this formatted in a more prosey-poem way, but it is fine the way it is. You have managed to intertwine love, nature, and an irrevocable sadness.


    • Cannonsfire gold member
      June 28
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      Thank you my sweet editing neice I wondered about doing it as all prose, but then it felt right to add the poem. Now you have me wondering lol, your honesty is always refreshing C


  • thepoetssoul
    June 28

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    Magnificient...
    You sing of beauty and dance in meadows with wolves and deer. You follow the whispering brook in your new found youth to where the river opens up to roar. You've touched the paintbrush of natures love, and yet the sadness remains somwhere hidden within words. So may you find that love that that left your heart, and dance in fields of yellow and crystal.
    Be blessed in all you ever do.

    Tony


  • Mariana gold member
    June 28

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    Beautiful. I was there in the moment.

    Mariana  

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