I been all round this small town
and there's one thing I know
The sky is falling on me now
I think it's time to go
Running out of atmosphere
fighting for my life
I feel the steely hand of fate
like a knife
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My purpose here has ended, stage lights start to dim
The curtain is calling, let me in
and take me down, down, down, to the ground
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Buried in the sands of time
diggin my way out
I feel the walls, they're closing in
no one hears me shout
Running out of time
fighting through the night
I watch the cold, hard hand of death
erase the light
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My purpose here has ended, the bells have all tolled
tomorrow's forever, in a future sold
So bring it down, down, down, to the ground
the sky is falling on us now
Author notes
OK, I guess I just feel overwhelmed lately but thats good for writing a blues song I guess 
D a r k w e l l
A contest entry
- Invite Only Contest :) by Cerulean Sunrise.
700 points, ended July 18, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congratulations on your honorable winner trophy! You deserve it after what I read here. This is nicely done!
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I like the sing-songy feel to this write. It had spectacular emotion, though I felt the imagery could have been a little more impactful. But it was a stunning piece nonetheless and wonderful for the prompt.
Best of luck in the contest.
Write on.
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On the day I was born
The birds in da sky cried...
heh
Thank you for this highly lyrical expression.
Much Love Always,
Mark
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Nice Write
liked it.. but still it's needed alot of work
the structure was weaker at some places
anyway, good luck
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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thanxu
i will tweak it more when i get my brain back. You can tell me what you think is weak that would help me to make it stronger. I'll give you a cookie if you do
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Wow.
Absolutely Fantastic M'dear. Wonderful write indeed. It's so full of clever parts and even deeper emotions. You've got so much talent, skill and smarts. Your poems are just bits of it. I love reading your pieces. They always leave me thinking and feeling. <3 it. I hope you feel better soon. I have been here. It's never fun, it's never easy..But I'm sure you'll break free soon enough love.
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LOL...
Feel better real soon....I know what this feels like! Something we all can relate to & you expressed this well. All the best in the contest. 
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I am not a musician, but I can hear the rhythms of the blues in this.
All blues speak of circumstances. Some are laments full of despair. Others tell of disappointments and regrets for choices made and their effects. Some, like this, just let us know the ride is over, for whatever it was good or bad. Whether a life or a particular moment, it is done but not despaired. The purpose here has ended, it's time to go, but there is a tomorrow.
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its been a good ride, so far i think ill keep riding
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Darn good lyrics!
Good job with a tough assignment! These words do invoke a set of images in me that are "Blues-ish!" I think you are well on the way to the next level of this contest and so Best of Luck to you, my friend!
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