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The Ditch

It stretched three houses across in either direction.

Wide and steep, it embodied the backyards.

It was a mystery, for no one could really remember

how it came to be.

Dried red soil filled its etage but at each day's

dawning,crystal dewdrops gave the soil a smooth

feel to the dozen of kids that would flail themselves

bright and early into the folds of this earthly phenom.

 

On hot days, we played there because it was cool.

On cold days, everyone stayed wrapped around

the pot-bellied stove inside.

I always came, to the special spot.

The haunted spot they called it.

Bushes only grew in the spot, lush, green bushes.

Tall bushes sprinkled with lilac berries.

Everyone stayed away, so did he.

 

The bushes always seemed to be growing.

They held my secrets, heard my prayers,

caught my tears and quell my fears.

There I found peace, I saw me as somebody,

but nobody saw why I needed that spot.

The little daft girl, they called me.

They watched as I entered the leafy

enclosure, with a jar of lemonade

to bury the sorrows of the previous night.

 

Wrapped in scratchy burlap sacks,

I came in the winter, seeking warmth

that the fire burning in the stove could not.

Seeking to douse the evil burning in my young

loins, giving my pain to the towering thickets.

They absorbed my sins, but at ten, why was

it my burden to bear?

 

They couldn't comprehend my fascination

with the spot.

It embraced me, they didn't.

It comforted me, they didn't

The spot knew, they claimed they didn't

It was there in the confounds of Carolinian soil,

knelling close to hell, is where I prayed, where

I cried, where my soul revived

 

I turned thirteen that year, and I could scarcely

fit into my spot any longer.

The bushes died that year, dropping berry

seeds into the crust of my refuge.

I died that year along with my dreams.

Every night he came to me and I had

no place to go.

The next year, the ditch started to dry up

and as mysteriously as it came to be, years

later only rocky remnants remained.

What remained of me didn't fair as well.

 

Marjorie Joyce Leslie

06/28/09

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  • Nicolette gold member
    July 10
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    I had a spot like this too when I was a little girl and reading your poem made me remember the times my parents called me, and how I ignored the calls to stay there in my special place a little longer. No wonder we become poets, is it? . A wonderfully moving and captivating story of a life you've penned here, Marjorie

    ~ Nicolette

  • I had no idea how much this was going to touch me when I started reading it...I wonder if the spot is meant to be symbolic - a place to go in your head while evil deeds occur to you - as well as a literal physical place. The words are beautiful, but they need not be, for the passion in this piece is quite enough to make is exceptional.

    I forgot how much I missed your word...<3 you dearie.

  • "The bushes died that year, dropping berry
    seeds into the crust of my refuge.
    I died that year along with my dreams.
    Every night he came to me and I had
    no place to go."


    I knew that this spot was yours for this very reason. I too had a spot behind my grandmother's house, and not until I went there did I find the peace, I so yearned for. I wish this had not, and does not happen to so many. It seems that the external scabs have dried up and left few scars but the internal scars never seem to completely heal.

    The last lines are so real in my heart. Your poem is sadly enchanting and darkly beautiful. Maybe that is because I know these words.



    All My LOVE ♥

    Renee


  • Diamond
    July 2
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    Captivating!

    This was pretty deep Joyce, you should make it into a short novel. I found it to be somewhat mysterious, somewhat sad, and very captivating. You're an awesome writer lady. Best wishes for the contest. I like this contest. I think I may give it a shot if I can get around to it. Avril

  • This was very captivating indeed. I was sad to have it end. The only thing I noticed was here...

    burlaps sacks

    burlap sacks? Maybe?

    Very nice piece. Thank you for entering it.


  • GotLilt
    June 28
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    This is so sadly captivating! Wonderfully done.

  • Bob Fox
    June 28

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    Majorie

    All I can say is wow...The further into the story the more captive I became and then like being cold cocked you hit me with the reason why it was your refuge. Again wow. I do hope though that it is only a poem. Powerful nevertheless.

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