I've tried to pretend it doesn't hurt
...Like you don't make me cry
But I've spent too many years denying it
Just to tell myself another lie
Everytime I try to see a way around it
The cruel memories and hot tears
Come rushing back and,
I just drown in it
...Again
I try to pretend it doesn't hurt
...I don't mean to be blunt
But I've been a victim of your 'psychosis"
Your little "I didn't know what I was doing"s
For as many years as I can remember
Everytime I try to forgive you for it
The ache behind my eyes begins to throb
The control over my tears and senses you rob
And I just drown in it
...Again
I've tried to pretend it doesn't hurt
That you didn't try to run my name and my person
Through the dirt, over, and over, and over again
I try to remember what you were like way back then..
But were you ever the happy memory I keep locked inside?
...If so, when?
Everytime I try to feel bad for not missing you
The pain you put me through comes right back
The numbness threatens to return
I try to pretend it doesn't hurt
...And it doesn't, it just continues to burn.
A contest entry
- Passion and Pain by Nyx Kerethas.
525 points, ended August 5, 15 entries
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Comments
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great write. deep emotions. good luck in contest.
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soooooo gooooood! i know i feel like this sometimesw! great work, i loved it|!
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I really like this!!! This is just the kind of thing I was looking for! Great write and good luck!
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powerful and superb though i would love to know which option inspired you for this
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wow
Wow,this piece is awesome.It is the second contest of mine that you have placed it in and it amazed me and bowled me over the first time,and has achieved the same again today. -
This is a very deep, emotional piece, one that I will find myself reading over and again. I loved that last line, it was a perfect ender. You did a fantastic job, thank you so much for entering this personal write.
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so sad.
but an excellent write..
thanks for entering,
good luck. -
yo, I enjoyed it and I really like what its about. Thanks for joining my moresome.
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This was very deep and descriptive. I enjoyed reading it.
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Wow this is definitely deep
I can relate to this and you did an amazing job
Wonderful wonderful job
-Damien
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I like the repeated "...again"
very nice.
Thnkas for entering
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Holy! Great job. This is deep and powerful, and relatable. I enjoyed the repetition. Best of luck to you in the contest.
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powerful... ive felt like this only once
Everytime I try to feel bad for not missing you
The pain you put me through comes right back
The numbness threatens to return
I try to pretend it doesn't hurt
...And it doesn't, it just continues to burn.
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AMAZING! this was really good! It was beautiful! it left me speechless, which isn't an easy thing to do. keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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Thank you for this master piece
Love this.It is just WOW WOW WOW -
wow
Thank you for the entry. And wow. I really have nothing to say. I'm really speechless. I really love it. Its amazing. The flow, the message, the entire poem is phenominal. Very powerful all the way through. Very very good. -
Very powerful poem indeed.
I could relate to it from the start to the end. Everybody goes through something like this at least once in his life and this poem describes it very well. -
A powerful poem. The reader indeed feels your pain. The last stanza is the most powerful. The subject of the poem has had such a grip on you that even when departed you have to feel guilty for not missing them, and the guilt feelings bring back the hurt - even if you say it doesn't hurt any more. This is a poem about truly inescapable thralldom.
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i feel-ya
its odd for me to read other peoples' poems and no tbe surprised when i relate bc where im from nobody is big on poetry and i know almost no one that writes also. so overall an awesome poem and i commend you on the way you wrote down your feelings...i feel ur pain. gawd, people suck! lol
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