The sound of your name
Through my throat & off my tongue
Shall be, remembered.
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Written March 21st, 2004
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I like Haiku's, but I do wonder how this fits in the contest.. Is it because of the title? Athena
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Brillant sweets
Luv it
Good luck in the contest
Luv n hugs
Susan~~~
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when are you going to tell me more about eggers?
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ren is all, great piece may be best man win
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i have a chihuahua named stimpy...yeah, i know it should have been ren, but trust me, stimpy fits better.
i digress...your poem...
have to admit a fondness for haiku
whether traditional or modern
i can't seem to get enough of them
thought you did a superb job on this one!
~liz -
You said a mouthful in a kingly fashion. Sometimes less is more! This is great!
Renee
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I met him today and he might publish me.
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the sarcastic author?
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You know who david eggars is?
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Ah I watched the episode last night when ren got a buffed chest implant and used the fat from stimpies ass? it was great.
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i know this is all serious and stuff...but its sunday...i'm on my second beer...and all i could think of was ren and stimpy...
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Very cool..the background in comments helped a bit, but really even without that, very cool.
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its very apt considering your name horus the way you wrote this sounds so very noble
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Ren is the magical rite of naming in Egyptian magic... Your secret name your original name, Your ren.
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hm.. i like this. it's simple and loving. Not confusing
well..maybe it is. I may just be too stupid to understand it. it says it's in a contest about Gods of Egypt? I don't see much about that, except maybe the title..but.. I don't know what the ren is.. it seems to me that it's someone telling an ex lover that they won't forget them.. poetry can be interpreted in so many different ways.
In the last line I *think* that the comma shouldn't be there? but then again, I'm not really sure. Just thought I'd ask.
Lovely lovely write
Audrey -
I like this poem cause it says a lot in a few words, and those are my favorite. Not a lot of haiku's can do tha. It's neat cause I had to read it a couple of time thinking whether it could be the name of a stranger you'll remember or a love, or a person you don't like.. it's great that it's open to interpretation I like to be made to think when I read poems
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