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Atomic Night Terrors


Hello you bastard
Accursed is her life
To which you haunt
In her darkest times
Nausea as she see's your face
Grief flows from losing her pride

Years go by
Out there you are
Un-aware of her asperity

Enragement as she cannot move on
Never-ending reminders
Of what went on
Ugly flashbacks haunt her soul
Grieve is what she cannot do
Her mind is set to really hurt you

Transmit the voices that
Over-run her mind

Fucking sick and tired of the
Insomnia that wants to betray
Never-ending bereavement of life
Dead with a black hole inside to stay

Assassinate this darkness that empowers her

Beasts of Venery
Using up all of her energy
Liquidate all of those vivid memories
Life to burst forth and
Every minute is a new step
To live through this eternal pain

 

 

 

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  • Shantti silver member
    October 1

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    This fresh write version is as passionate and hearfelt as the original. I can see and feel the hate in these writes. I hope you still have the version with "Hating you enough to find a bullet". Both versions are remarkable.
    Thank you so much for entering this in my contest.


  • Shantti silver member
    July 12
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    Yay


    I really enjoyed this.

    "Hating you enough to find a bullet"

    I've grown really fond of acrostics, and you did remarkable with this.
    Thank you for entering in my contest
    Best wishes


  • Antebellum
    July 10
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    wow. an acrostic!!
    this is stunning.

    this is very deserving of a gold.


  • Ami
    July 6

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    Wow awesome acrostic! And thank you for entering a fresh write this was Amazing Thank you so much for entering my contest
    And Good luck! -♥Amy♥


  • moaner
    July 2

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    That definetly has plenty of anger in it! That was a great poem, and really loving "Assassinate this darkness that empowers her". Some of the stanzas could use a little work for flow, but the word usage is fantastic in this one. nice work xxx


    • DinkyDiver gold member
      July 2
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      yeh I must admit the flow isn't great but I get my point across good and proper eh hahaha Glad u liked that line ... was one of my fave lines hehe xxxx


  • HereComesTheSun
    June 30

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    you are a stunning writer and your ability to do acrostics is spellbinding i mean your emotion was raw and well done.

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