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The Witches of Hope

I met them
when I was still in braces and band-aids
and an A-cup bra,
bitten nails, awkward smile,
I was halfway through childhood’s door,
but they said I had something special,
and would I sit with them for a spell?

Seven women on a porch
surrounded my mama on a summer night;
the air was heavy as cobbler
with smoke and Shalimar -
they had come to save mama
from going off the deep end, her strange friends,
the women I would come to call
the Witches of Hope.

“Don’t make the mistake
of ever thinkin’ you have just one mind”

They collected pieces of mama-
took her tears and transformed them into laughter,
engaged her demons in conversation
then put them quietly to bed
with soothing songs and sweet apricot brandy.

I watched as they danced
across the old wooden porch, outshining the moon
with their brilliant womanhood,
and my heart was full, as full as a starry sky,
to witness a power I had never known -
some may not believe in magic,
some only see things in black and white,
but on that summer night
I saw my mama begin to believe

and I began
to hope...




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  • ecrivain01 gold member
    November 22
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    Well crikey ...

    cricketjeff is correct. This is a marvelous poem, and a marvelous story.

    I think there should be an "a" in front of spell in line 7. Perhaps it was a typo?

    Kudos on a story well told and a job well done.


  • AutumnAshe
    October 8

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    There was nothing in the poem not perfectly suited. This was so vividly captured that I could almost beleive I was living the moment alongside the Witches of Hope. I am in awe!


  • Roseamongweeds
    October 4
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    Amazing. It captures a feeling and transforms it into words... it's exactly what poetry should be.


  • albymyheart gold member
    October 3

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    You described the magic of this moment with your usual creative flair...you never disappoint your readers. In fact, with your words, you can turn any of the ordinary occurances in life into a magical, thought provoking display. Awesome write...Alby


  • spiritraven
    September 1

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    So well written

    A tribute to womankind. Words that flow from the page and the emotions flood your senses. Thank you so much for writing such a glorious piece

  • ee heheheheeheee... well written indeed my pretty, tis got the might of whats right and witty and just the right dash of moon lit madness we should all enjoy...

    w candles and incense
    -jas :

  • This was absolutely beautiful. I have always hoped to find women like this in my life. I have two, a sister and a friend. I think that poetry and inanimate objects tend to take the places of the others. Wonderful piece.


  • Aelten
    August 20

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    Oh, I loved this~
    I floated along...
    "They collected pieces of mama-
    took her tears and transformed them into laughter,
    engaged her demons in conversation
    then put them quietly to bed
    with soothing songs and sweet apricot brandy."

    Wow, such excellence.
    A~

  • wow,
    amazing imagery,
    especially the beginning.
    Excellent write:]

  • Humm..the curious memories you live ..create and relived through it makes you enriched and makes you complete once again...and this is done once again...


  • Polaja Greeters member
    July 21

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    You are gorgeous - I love the language in this poem - the child's voice is perfect you never ever cease to amaze


    Polly


  • Sheli silver member
    July 19
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    Exquisite!


  • Rick Weston silver member
    July 18
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    Very well written. Each line pulled me into the next.

  • Bob Fox
    July 18

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    Poet

    Twice when young and very sick visions such as these appeared to me. one time surrounding my bed. Littele people in white gowns. Moving and watching. And then the fever broke. Strange things o happen.

  • Take a bow.... i love it! You have captured the memory of this moment in time quite vividly...very nicely done!

    “For those who believe, no proof is necessary. For those who don't believe, no proof is possible.”--Stuart Chase


  • tomisb
    July 18

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    No greater than love, without being expressed in need only as gift. Magic isn't in the mantra, the spell or the coven -- to understand it is to learn how to relive the moment until each moment is its own glorious pearl and people are not made but instead allowed to flourish in their own light.

    But, then, I am only nonsense, hopscotch marker, the fading outline of a foursquare. To often the blackbirds are ignored until we need someone to blame. Keep fanning these fires and perhaps you will learn the dances of your heart.

    Love, Tom B.

  • White Witches -- your mamma was lucky they came into her life. Sounds like they knew what to do. Well written.


  • NickRhyme
    July 18
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    This is an okay poem. Tells a good story but then, it felt more like a short story than a poem. Idk. Still, good work.


  • Night Hope gold member
    July 18

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    Those who only see the world in black & white miss out on the entire spectrum of color, let alone the various shades of gray that cannot be denied. We cannot see miracles happen, either, but we cannot deny their presence any more than we can deny the existence of love...or the wind. This is such a glorious piece, Sweetie. You truly should write more about them; we've always been told to "write what we know", right? Your storytelling shines in this one. By the way, are you aware that this piece is being featured in Adrian's newest titles contest? (lunarlunacy). And well it should be. It's a great one. My newest favorite of yours. But then, I always have been partial to Hope, ya know.




  • Aerden gold member
    July 18

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    Oh, please, please do write more about them!

    I like the down-hominess of this, the simple words which paint vivid pictures. You can feel the power, and it's wonderful. I look forward to reading further poems about these women.

    What I'd love to see, though, is a novel. You could write an awesome novel with this. I've bookmarked this poem. It's brilliant.


  • Swan song gold member
    July 18
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    Lane reading your poetry is like eating very rich chocolate cake Every syllable is delectiable and when I eat cholcolate cake i really dig in and eat til i am ten pounds heavier and sick. lol.
    But this poem was lovely as beautiful perhaps as your soul is but not likely


  • gypsy camp
    July 17
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    lovin' reading you from peru, lane.

  • I did not like this poem.

    Overall grade: 2/10

    Thanks for entering

  • Oh how beautiful. Such a sisterhood. What beautiful, healing relationships. I love the spiritual undertones you used here... to great effect. Really enjoyed this!


  • voices
    July 7

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    even better than the first time i read it.

    hey, love your new page.
    yeah, i dig Mark Strand also.


  • JinSays gold member
    July 7

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    the air was heavy as cobbler
    with smoke and Shalimar -
    they had come to save mama
    from going off the deep end, her strange friends,
    the women I would come to call
    the Witches of Hope.

    cobbler. nobody makes cobbler here, Laney
    I miss it so.
    Shalimar, lord I remember that smell, just as if you'd taken the bottle and sprayed it right in my direction.
    Nice. A bit of the Mayfair Witches came back in the title, but I didnt not expect your lovely story.
    I should have known better
    Love to ya always,
    jin

  • i think these are the most interesting women and i do wish to hear more about them.

    my dad had one friend that reminds me of them. he was a nice older black man that taught me about frogs and god. this piece reminded me of him.

    thank you for the most enjoyable read!

  • heavy as cobbler, full as a starry sky...these are incredible images. Like every piece you write, this one leaves me awed and thankful that I took the time to stop by for a read. Excellent job Lane.
    Rory


  • GotLilt
    July 3
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    Very worthy of it's popularity.

  • It was AMAZING!!! The hole idea of witches spending hope...it's just incredible!!! I loved it!!! I already had a theme with magic, now you made that thing bigger!!! Thank you!!! Continue writing!!!


  • afroqban
    July 3

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    girl you know you make poetry that anyone can enjoy. i love your pen! awesome work to see this side of your brain

  • samudra
    July 2
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    nice,good realization...I will read it again..Dalaney.


  • motel silver member
    July 2

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    a strong write ... I like the mixture of outer/inner and seeing the different shades of our persona and then existence itself.
    by the way, for me it's all magic ... including your write.
    thanks.

  • a good poem penned - ah do not make the mistake... aye, i think many do make this mistake, the mind is a multiplexed vision of dark and light. this reminds me with the witches, many many years ago when i was very small, it must have been halloween, for a woman dressed as a witch approached and i just froze lol a far cry from hope like here but the memory remains nontheless.

  • So it took me a long time, but I found the word that makes me think of the majority of your work more than any other... Americana. Like no one else on the site, you capture the real life feel of American struggles and joys, vices and virtues. You speak in such a way that your pieces will never be dated. Clearly, rhythmically and straight to the heart every time. I had been in here before to this poem and passed it over after the first few lines because I was just too heavy... but know, Lane... I love this. Truly. Bravo.

  • oh, how lovely. Homey and comfortable, and yet magical and quietly thrilling all at once. Your imagery is breathtaking, the warmth and love in the words engaging. Thank you so much!

  • mmmmmm this is deliciously beautiful, portraying to me the special friendships that can be forged between groups of women who uphold and bolster one another is times of distress. So beautiful.


  • Edi-mae
    July 1

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    this is a lovely piece of work, full of imagery. the closeness and connection is portrayed beautifully.


  • Wolfdog silver member
    July 1

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. You express your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.

  • i ablsolutely loved ur poem it is something very diffrent thanks for sharing it

  • there really aren't any words that can be said, that hasn't already been said. as always this is amazing.

    justgot2loveme

  • Great Stuff

    They collected pieces of mama
    took her tears and transformed them into laughter
    engaged her demons in conversation
    then put them quietly to bed

    This is great stuff: wit, wisdom, and fun!
    I'm jealous of your abilities!


  • simplewords
    June 30
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    This reminds me of a true friend pact..like the yaya sisterhood..Very inventive and beautiful!

  • A magical and captivating piece of poetry that was a pure delight to read and ponder.

  • Gave me such a wonderful feeling of hope and love! This is beautifully written! Great imagery! I felt like I was right there with you!

  • Wow! That's magic in itself!


  • Balldinger silver member
    June 30

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    Witches Woo...

    Ya-Ya on, Sister Dimentia. The sweet mystery of lavender land will slope toward you when you most rely uon it. the grey matter is so much more appealing, isn't it?

    N O spells no...

  • davidwright silver member
    June 30

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    You've captured the moment very well with delightful images that would titillate even the laziest of minds.

    Good luck and happy trails.

  • A pleasant story of the close relationship that women share. Unlike men they help and support one another seemingly intuitively.


  • Solo Wisp gold member
    June 30

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    Hope is always a good thing .. and to have it 7-fold, even better.

    'mind' to me, is an interpreted aspect of one's own preference. I believe in one mind, but tend toward that mind being capable of handling many aspects or facets of life - is an apple still an apple cut into different shapes. As I've gone through life, I've delved more into the right and wrong scenario, in my earlier years striving for what is 'right' .. these two areas meld together and really, its all subjective. There are no rights or wrongs to me, now, only decisions that have implications based on the environment one is in.

    ... and I'm rambling ... sorry. This poem tells your story well. I believe these 'witches' would be a joy to hang with and hope to see more of your thoughts and experiences with them.



    ~Steve


  • PoesyPeruser
    June 30
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    Beautiful interpretation of sisterhood!
    Poesy

  • Just a poet gold member
    June 30

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    From the first stanza, with its magical, half contemporary, half contemplative descriptions of a young girl's view on herself and adults, including the masterly "spell" for a poem with witches in the title!

    Through a stanza of unmatchable imagery, memory and magic, past deep philosophy, metaphor and so much more and on to a conclusion that punches like a heavyweight champion in a flyweight tournament.

    Oh DAMN it
    What I mean to say is this is a poem.

    The best poem on AP.

    J

  • wow amazing...or bewitching....lol i should say..well done


  • songstress80
    June 29

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    such a sweet and wonderful write...it's full of positive aspects in a negative world of today...an excellent write...thanks for sharing it and bringing your piece together!


  • ajocean silver member
    June 29
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    very nice piece keep it coming


  • Endeavor gold member
    June 29

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    Very Good


    some may not believe in magic,
    some only see things in black and white,
    but on that summer night
    I saw my mama begin to believe

    This was a great story
    it just showes how much is possable
    Faith and beliefe come in many forms I think

    Very nice lane

    Rick

  • mcfreeman
    June 29
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    U paint a marvelous picture


  • NickRhyme
    June 29

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    Great


    “Don’t make the mistake
    of ever thinkin’ you have just one mind” - best line. Good work.


  • My Chronos gold member
    June 29

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    There are many different kinds of magic...the ones that stir the heart are the best. I really like how you write.

  • A++++

    Wonderful wonderful!! I love it!

    -Delaney


  • Neha Sharma silver member
    June 29

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    Cool... its quite a different kind of a poem. I have not read this kind of stuff since many days... It has a dual touch to it, personification as well as character description. Both ways its fun to read. Thanks for sharing
    Good wishes
    -Neha


  • EMOverlord
    June 29
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    Wow..

    Amazing how you worded it, it's a really good poem.

  • This is wonderful Laney. Could be the beginings of a novel. Well done!


  • Daizee silver member
    June 28

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    Childish worlds are so small at that age, and our mamas are often times at the core. When they ache, we ache with them. To see her find relief, in whatever form, lifts our minds and our spirits then. I can see why these women made such an impression. I,too, will be back to read more of then if you write.


  • charcoal
    June 28
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    stunning poetry. yes.


  • arafura gold member
    June 28
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    I'm stunned... you continue to amaze and delight me. Brilliant!

  • wow..brilliant...a very intriguing piece




  • parenchma
    June 28

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    Sit for a spell
    perfect double entendre

    Will have to look up shalimar

    As one who has spent more than a little effort understanding
    I see a wondrous caring that bears sweet fruit.
    As we search for the knowledge of good and evil
    many minds have slipped a bit from the path...

    It is good if two walk a path, if one slips; the other will help to regain the footing. Tragic is the one who walks alone. -Proverbs


  • Garmond gold member
    June 28

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    Oh God I hope the words do come Lane. I am utterly intrigued by this tale.

    “Don’t make the mistake
    of ever thinkin’ you have just one mind”

    Hmmmm, the 'key' to all 'magic'... the key to everything awaits within the wisdom of this line.
    Every line awakes my wonder though.

    You have blended my curiousity and fascination now


  • truemaliboo
    June 28
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    sheer poetry

    I love line 4 and 5.sheer poetry.

  • rosecourts
    June 28
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    Brava, Brava


  • KariiB89
    June 28

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    Beautiful.
    I absolutely love it...
    hope to hear more of them....
    Good Luck, and blessed be.


  • CovertEnmity
    June 28

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    Captivating

    As if the title wasn't enough, the poem was great. It's rare to find people who put the right words together and create something wonderful.^_^


  • Miss Macabre
    June 28

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    This is wonderful poem, full of hope. I really enjoyed it, and the women in it. You worded everything so beautifully.


  • Rosalinda
    June 28
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    This is a nice and lovely poem , keep up


  • hawkeslake gold member
    June 28

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    What Sue said!
    I vaguely recall hearing about these sorts of witches, perhaps in a dream. Please tell us more... absolutely fabulous and intriguing poem. Lita


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    June 28

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    This is stunning Lane, another small chapter in your life, but to a young girl a very important one that stayed with you ... let's hear more of these Witches, you have bought them to life, don't let them fade to obscurity now.
    I love it,

    Love
    Sue

  • This is a very beautiful poem.It touches the heart in so many ways.I hope you always belive in the magicks.

    Blessed be

  • wow, i love this its so magical and provokes a sense of wonder, its a beautiful story and you wrote it brilliantly, thank you for sharing x

  • I love this, so very very much....
    It's very touching, and your love of these women shine bright

    I wish deep in my heart that I could have known them

  • Rowan gold member
    June 28

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    I can hardly wait.
    Stunnin, wish I knew them.
    More please.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    June 28

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    Some poets say only show, some say only tell, here you have the perfect recipe of show and tell. Told in a way that mesmerizes and allows the Witches of Hope to dance again.


    Wonderful!


  • jazzcat gold member
    June 28

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    Wonderful writing. I like how we can see it all and we really get the feeling of looking through a young girls eyes at what is going on. You crafted this well and you draw your readers in with sights, sounds, smells and feelings we all can relate to. A great story.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    June 28

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    oh my god..

    this is astounding! I feel like a little kid, this so wonderfully penned you made me feel as though i fell into a dream where i lived with u and experienced this entire scene unfolding..exceptional


  • IronIcecream
    June 28

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    i was seven
    i still remember her eyes burning
    the colour of shallow water
    couldn't sleep all night


  • Net
    June 28
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    A beautiful story told with eloquent words. I enjoyed reading this, thank you


  • valefor gold member
    June 28
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    Excellent piece, thanks for sharing!


  • Mariana gold member
    June 28

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    This had me entranced from beginning to end. Such an amazing write. Well done.

    Mariana  


  • nordicsky silver member
    June 28

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    Thanks for taking my imagination to another place and another time.
    If I did not believe in magic, I think I would now. It runs through your poetry like a silver thread. There is magic in every sentence word and syllable that you write.

    Thanks for posting this.
    Love, Peter


  • malmadre gold member
    June 28

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    Ah! the magic shines through, this must come from the lore passed down through your heritage and the places you inhabit. Gosh! this could be the beginnings of a book on the bestseller list, seriously. The air heavy as cobbler with smoke and shalimar, it fills me!


  • Amera gold member
    June 28
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    Stunning!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    June 28
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    I concur with Mairi...moving piece Lane.

  • Topnotchsy
    June 28

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    Reading this poem and the Author Notes I have to wonder how (and why) you avoided sharing this part of you with us as you've shared so many others.


  • Yemassee gold member
    June 28

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    Write more about them, yes. It's about the best thing I have read from your pen. Poignant, and being a lover of fiction, it tells a story, but in a decided poetic manner.

    We all have strong memories of certain things. They help shape our lives even though we may not realize it. But a poem like this may reveal to you, and to Dalaneyphiles (copyrighted, Yem 2009, lol) just how important such a memory can be.

    Above all it's told with a panache that was a pleasure to read this lazy Sunday morning.


  • Emmyb gold member
    June 28

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    Lane. i read this with some totally magical music on and a bit of a whiskey aftertaste in my mouth - early on a sunday morning. this poem has just brought my day to life. What a tribute to some fantastic and moving women in your life. a magical poem


  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 28

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    I do not know where to start
    nor where to end.

    Where do you start to review perfection?

    I think this is better than Shiloh Blue. I don't know if I now want to give up or write a million poems.

    BLOODY HELL THIS IS GOOD!!!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    June 28

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    Lane, I have bookmarked this, simply because I think it is one of the best things you have ever written. I don't think I need to repeat (for the umpteenth time) what it is you do with moments-in-time; but there is something very special about this one. This is a wonderful scene - a mother, surrounded one evening by a group of particular friends, putting her and the world to rights, all seen through the eyes of someone at childhood's door (interesting how you choose that moment to look back rather than forward to womanhood) maybe not understanding precisely what is going on, what is being said, but feeling that there is something profoundly special happening. You express it as magic and witchcraft. It is outstanding poetry, sheer brilliance.


  • wbiro gold member
    June 28

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    these seem to be a prior generation... I hope you also cover the present... I'm sure the inspirations are there...

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