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Life in a glance

As i sit here wondering what to pen.
I find myself in a spot all writers must meet.
It seems as my faithful quill moves toward the paper
the ink seams to vanish, nothing seems to stick.

I could write a Haiku,

thats 7-3-7, no no no its 5-3-5, no thats not it.

forget it Haiku is for kids in grammer school.

How about a Limmeric, umm perhaps not for the only one i know

is of a man from Nantuckett who sat on a bucket.

Anyways those our for teenagers.

I know i could write a story fit for reader digest.

No that still won't do for that is for those drones in the cubicles down town.

What to write, what to write. 


So now i sit here at the playground,
watching the kids play with ease.

Not one  care in the wrold.
Not knowing, not caring of what life is like.
How sweet it was to run to mommy for a kiss
when we got hurt.

They go martching one by one,
up they slide and down they go.
Sliding down in such a spectacular display.
All uniform all in training.
Here they go two by two towards a flight simulatorknown as a swing.
Push, Push, Push.

They go up and up in thier cockpits.
They let go all flying like rockets in the air.
They march and trian in a little millitary fashion,
what a veiw what a scence.

As i sit here wondering what to pen.
I find myself in a spot all writers must meete.
It seems as my faithful quill moves toward the paper
the ink seams to vanish, nothing seems to stick.

So now i sit here at the mall.
Watching the preteens move on by.
They come in like groves with no care at all.
Thinking they are one of a kind.
Yet, each one is more like the last then the first.
All wanting exceptance, all wanting individuality.

Here the barbie girls, stop and stare.

At the jewlery stores  rare glittery displays.
While all the jocks stare at Jewl's rear.
The outcast march into stores full of noies,

made by a 100 cats being thrown in water.
And, the geeks sulk into the video game stores.
All trying to get the latest copy of D&D,

for the new XBOX-WII-420 handheld.

All diffrent yet all the same. All wanting the same.
They can't wait to join the rat race.
To be full of responsibilites and forced to care.
All wanting this dreadful teenage years to get deleted.


As i sit here wondering what to pen.
I find myself in a spot all writers must meet.
It seems as my faithful quill moves toward the paper
the ink seams to vanish, nothing seems to stick.

Now i sit, down town.
As i watch the men and women all dressed in grey walk on by.
it seams like just a few years ago they fought for their indiviuality,
and now they have conformed into slaves.

All in grey, all with a worn down breifcase.
All saving money for the just in case.
They martch into their office to sit in a 3 walled cell.
They file the papers, and design the spreadsheets
just to do it all agian and agian the next day.

As i sit here wondering what to pen.
I find myself in a spot all writers must meet.
It seems as my faithful quill moves toward the paper
the ink seams to vanish, nothing seems to stick.

Now as i sit on this bench.
i see my coffee cup is empty, a sign my break is up.
Back to a life of solitude and trash.
For as i see all of you from your carefree days to the days of just in case.
Not many see me, for i am the one who cleaned out your trash.

I sit here wondering,

 if i will ever be able to write agian.
Now whats this my page is full of marks.

Its seems to me life is nothing more than a march.

So as i sit here wondering what to pen.
I find myself in a spot all writers must meet.
It seems as my faithful quill moves toward the paper
the ink seams to flood the page, and it seems to stick.

Author notes

It not as good as my first copy of this but, my stupid comuter made the first go by by. But i still like it alot and think it was fun to write. And hope it wiull be fun for you 2 read.

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  • Loveberry
    July 29

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    ooh such an interesting perspective! i liked that i could see your thought process... like each step as it came along, you seem to be a very observant person :] i also liked seeing each young age group mentioned, and stereotypes are always interesting to comment on :] haha one thing that i did not enjoy was spelling, i unfortunately happen to be a slight grammar freak lol. but i thoroughly enjoyed this piece, it was.... inspiring, and thus perfect for my contest :

    thanks for the entry and good luck!

  • mwzephyr
    July 7
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    ok

    A parodox it is to write indeed...
    Interesting thought patterns.


  • Pkwiki
    July 7

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    A fun read.

    I loved the poem, the militaristic feel of the small children was slightly intimidating (Athesit Pacifist, extremes scare me) and the only problem I have is with the description of geeks. I am a proud geek! Even in jest claiming that your average geek plays DND is kinda riduculous... Then again, your attack on the console industry these days made me lol. >.>

    • MR Frood
      July 7
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      thanks for your comment and as far as the d&d comment being a geek myself i figured that would be something that ost people would understand its not liek many ppl would under stand WoW so yeah and yeah im still waiting for the new console to come out (ps did you not catch that you dont play D&D on a consol) hehehehe


      • Pkwiki
        July 9
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        I ignored that over the overarching wrongness of an average nerd playing DnD! DnD is a game for gentleman, Halo is a game for people who tried to eat thier own shoes.
        And as for playing... Used to be a DM for a few years, lol =D *cough* Im a nerd and I am proud!


  • Wolfdog silver member
    July 7

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    Excellent

    Very well written, indeed. I rather like the sense of humor you expressed in this write. Thanks for sharing this one with us.

  • i really enjoyed reading your thoughts on people watching, as im sure a lot of people do me included, i think many of these things too, a good write, best of luck in the contest

  • Im getting a little tongue in cheek sort of feel about this poem and I certainly enjoyed reading it Its always nice to people watch and you've transfered both it and the essense of finding something to write about quite nicely. I think you could do to touch up the spellnig abit in some areas though.

    Very nice work

    "The outcast march into stores full of noies,
    made by a 100 cats being thrown in water."

    I will add that the noise is there to make us mighty *chuckles*

    • MR Frood
      June 29
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      thanks you for your comment i know there is several corrections needing to be made but my computer wont let me fix them so i have to get to the library to fix it.

  • I love it...I like all the images of people going by. I'm going to call it a people poem. It's like mall watching.

    Ps. It's Limerick. ^_^
    And I don't sulk into the video game store...I run spastically waving my arms and making aeroplane noises with my mouth.

    Síochán leat
    ~Mairéad~

    • MR Frood
      June 27
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      hahahahahahahahahaha i would love to see you runito a store pretending to be an airplane vrrrroom

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