with you-
my shoes had soles
filled with my feet
they had;
…one direction
when you
chose to leave
I decided,
to go barefoot
Author notes
I didn't think about you today. not even once.
'I could not follow you'
My profound poetry
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- I didn't think about you today. not even once. by JinSays.
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In brevity and otherwise, this is beautifully sad and I am always amazed at peoples abilities to create so much imagery and life with so few words.
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you're pretty good at it yourself!
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Well penned bronze.
Barefoot is always the way to go.
Buddy
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thank you Mal. this is wonderful.
Love,
jin -
excellent!
Your words express such sad and tender emotions.
I love the way you are able to be so profound with so few words and lines.
A special talent indeed.
Good luck in this contest!
Jeannette
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awwww!!! omg!! i love this! so sentimental! so adorable!...the distance one will go for another..the poor bleeding feet that is trudging over rocks and sand...sighh..n i love the word play..perfect little piece!
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i am barefoot too
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ohh goodie
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i'm thread along on intrigue. well done.
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thanks doll
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beautiful.. short and yes, profound. I would rather walk barefoot on my own than in shoes chosen for me that did not fit.
Well done!
Jo
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