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Broken Boy (Kyle's Poem)

Put up that knife,
unload that gun.
Do you really want to end your life,
over what the world has done?
You're a broken boy who never had a chance,
and whose life seemed perfect at first glance.

Don't leave everyone that loves you behind,
this can all get better if you give it some time.
But times running out,
and the angel on your right is a whipser, while the devil over rides her with a shut.
You're a broken Boy who felt all alone,
so he took his life for reasons unknown.

It doesn't seem like it now, but your actions will cause alot of pain,
so keep your heart beating, because ending your life would be a real shame.
With you gone so many hearts will always be broken,
and every one will blame themselves for the words they left unspoken.
So broken boy, what's the rush?
Stop and think of all the hearts you will crush.

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  • "So broken boy, what's the rush?
    Stop and think of all the hearts you will crush." I really like this poem. It tells me not to kill myself for all the ones who love. Great job and Good luck.
    Cant think of any suggestions. Keep this poem like it is cause it might have a good chance.