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in the corner

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Residual screams stain the cracks between chipped paint;
Seeping out into the hands of insanity,
giving them foreboding courage

and saturating their jagged fingernails
with a lurid conviction of escape.


The smell of burnt powder still lingering from the barrel

as smoke twists like a spirit wrenching in pain above the body

until the end comes to the pattern of dark desperation that haunted. 

Leaving the air of the room shifting like a sigh of relief.


Eyes flooded with crimson grief,
as another lost soul has chosen to burn out,

rather than fade away
in the corner.








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Image titled "The Corner" From an Unkown User of Deviantart.com.

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  • LonelyAngel
    July 14

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    Imppressive.

    Poet, this is amazing, impressive and oh so dark! The imagery is well explained by the the picture but I could have sussed out the image just by reading it. You will go far, a chilling and painful poet.

    Well done, best of luck in the contest,

    xYx


  • The Cube
    July 13

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    Garggle spiders...steal lipsticks....she climbs the girth....This is an impressive write. Very well done.

  • oh my god, this was amazing. very chilling ! i love the first stanza the most- it's so powerful and wonderfully dark. i'm really surprised you didn't win an thing in any other contests ! this is just so awing.

    great job ! best of luck in the contest


  • Paloszoo gold member
    July 4

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    Fantastic metaphors. You used the prompt well. This piece touched me personally, but it was a chilling, dark read. Thanks for entering my rounds contest and for showing your work here. It's a pleasure reading it!

  • fasinating picture. Both the one you have posted and the one your poem paints. I really loved everything about this it was a really amazing read. You did such a wonderful job on this. Thanks so very much for entering.

  • J Macabre gold member
    July 2

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    This is extremely detailed with aura. Just the feel of this and how you focused on the rooms feel afterwards rather then the act itself. extremely awesome write.

  • The imagery in this was powerful. Deep and dark this was, which attracted me to it in the first place. A wonderful, dark piece full of foreboding.  Very well done.

     

    Dark Wishes

    Wayne Leon

  • Bob Fox
    June 27

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    Poet

    Luris convictions of escape. One great phrase. Also perfect words for the picture. One excellent piece of writing indeed.

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