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Shudder

weight crushed by demolished furniture,
insides are damaged beyond repair.
 
Bruised lips shiver as blood pours,
secrets revealed ~ created chaos.
 
 

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prompt - Stolen Wings - 20 Words

A contest entry

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  • Snowbear gold member
    June 27

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    Very intriguing, expecially the line "secrets revealed". I've got an image in my head here of that scene, a very powerful one. I loved your take on the prompt!


  • Mariana gold member
    June 27

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    Very abstract view of the prompt. This is good. Well done Kari and good luck

    Mariana  

  • DecorusApparatus
    June 27

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    This is a really individual and unique take on the prompt, I admire your take in this.
    Good luck!
    --Katie.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    June 27

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    This is a great take on the prompt - I love the darkness, and I never would have thought of something like this! Beautifully done


    Polly


  • Cyanide Dreams
    June 27

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    What a dark yet delightful take on the prompt. I enjoyed this piece muchly. Your imagery is great and I really liked the emotions in this. Gave me goosepimples. Great job on this and good luck in the contest.

    josh


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    June 27

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    Ohh *shivers*
    This is such a gorgeous and powerful take on the prompt; best of luck in the contest!

    ♥ Maria ♥

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