In the moment between two breathes
when closing eyes would see and not forget
when time would hold your heart a captive
yet space gives way to none but her regrets
In between a heart's beat and its break
when the question, for the answer's sake
will stretch her hand but dare not take
the truth in choices we all make
In that moment we stand still...
... but should we?
Please tell me what you think
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I really like this, especially the first stanza. I got a feeling of being held captive to past memories, can't forget em no matter how much you'd like to. Wonderfully penned.
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my mouth was open when i finished reading this. the moment between two breaths, when my heart stopped for a split second, not knowing if the heart will beat with the next, or will break under the harshness of the beating.
we can't help but stand still in that moment. there is a time in our journey that we must stand still, to see the bigger picture... to know it will be. on the other hand, in order to keep growing, there has to be stepping forward after the resting period.
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I love your rhetorical question. I guess it all depends on the circumstances. Thanks for sharing this fine write with us. -
Hmmm, very thought provoking. . . .full of stuff that a person could torture themself with for ages. . .if they wanted to.
Full of what if's and could have beens or should have dones or not done...
every moment effects every other. . .and your poem almost makes me want to turn a thing or two in my own head. . .but I've done that before, so I'll do something else instead
Although, in the end it sounds to me like it is about personaly responsibility. . .for ones own actions or inactions.
Glad you are writing poems again!
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