There is so much darkness in the human mind
so much pain although the sun may shine
even on the brightest day
the darkness is where he wants to stay
I have no idea why he feels these things
for he will never know what tomorrow brings
and in his sorrow all i see
is what he will always mean to me
he has been my rock when the earth falls down
he has been the joker, the happy clown
he has been my shelter in the rain
he has brought me smiles, cleared my pain
and although his name is hard to find
he is in my heart, my soul, my mind
please excuse his angry show
it just takes time for love to grow
and happiness is on the rise
so please look behind his disguise
he seems so angry, broken and torn
like the rose bush he is full of thorns
but if i need a helping hand
i can always count on this man
so in the darkness he will stay
and I will continue to hope and pray
for his salvation is in sight
on this cold and dreary night.
Author notes
For my one true love, trapped forever in his own mind
A contest entry
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this is a lovley piece of work, excelent metaphores and the rhyming is good!
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I love the way you asked if your muse (an abstract) was back, alive.. Great piece secretive yet inviting.. like peeking into someones head. Perfect! Your mind works in a way that would fit my contest please check it out I would love a piece by you! http://allpoetry.com/contest/2451555
xo
Cybilseyes
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I love this. It's very touching and beautiful(: I really like these lines "he has been my shelter in the rain
he has brought me smiles, cleared my pain
and although his name is hard to find
he is in my heart, my soul, my mind
please excuse his angry show" Great write(:
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Wow do I know you?
In all seriousness, it is nice to know that I'm not the only guy who is like this. I love it, a beautiful (and personally touching) write. The rhyming feels a little forced, but it doesn't break the flow, so it's not bad. Lines 10 and 12 (i think ) need a comma though.
Share this, and your love, support, and confidence with him, every day. You may not change him, but at least he won't be alone in the dark.
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thank you and it kinda does seem a bit forced but alas it was not it just flowed from me like that...I actually didn't realize i was rhyming till i was half way through. As for the lines I can not see which ones you were speaking of so if you could help me on that i would appreciate it.Thank you for the wonderful comment
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