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Delayed

Her eyes, so soft, so vulnerable.
Her breath, so light, so afraid.
Her touch, so tentative,
So cold, so imitative.
Her lips, so lost, so betrayed.

I'd kiss every agony, willing,
Never confessing to shame.
But her simple complexities,
Holding my memories,
Make me, but a moment, delayed...

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As always, thanks for looking.

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  • nobodys-girl
    June 28

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    I love this. Not only is the love in this so easy to see, but the rhyme of it is just amazing. It really was a beautiful poem. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!


  • Teuc813
    June 28

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    ummmmm... who is this about? just curious... and I suppose possibly a bit nosey of me too.... but hey, you said to ask! even though I have no clue what ispired this I still think it is very beautifully written! good work!!!


    • TearsYouBleed
      June 28
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      About?

      A girl... No one you would know...
      And it's not nosy, considering (in my AN) I told those who had questions to ask.

      You should just be glad that I'm writing rhymes, again.
      [even if they're nothing like your little 'a-b-c-b' format]

      c[;

      • Teuc813
        June 28
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        (wait. I had a rhyme scheme? I was unaware... I just rhyme...) yeah I know, I was a bit shocked by that! and I would try free-verse but I really don't know how... I only know how to rhyme... I've tried free-versing but it really isn't all that good. nice pic. by the way!

        • TearsYouBleed
          June 28
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          Yep, you do!
          It goes like this:

          "First line.
          Un-rhyming second line.
          Un-rhyming third line.
          Rhymes with second line."

          [repeat until reader dies of boredom]

          Get it? See how mine are different? Learn, dear one...

          • Teuc813
            June 28
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            that's not all I do. I change it up some times. Like Not So Secret Admirer. and Waiting is abab(if I have figured this out correctly...). and To Clarify Our Case is not gonna kill anyone from boredom! I could rant on but I'm getting bored over this fake anger... but I did try free-writing. and you never commented on it.

            • TearsYouBleed
              June 28
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              Fine, I'll rephrase.
              You use typical, boring, four-lined rhyme schemes.
              Better?

              I would have commented if there was anything worth commenting on.
              ;P

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