winter orchard--
except for bird song
fruitless
Andrew Hide
21~3~2004
Author notes
First published in Simply Haiku September 2004
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Written March 21st, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- 30 minute Contest by Nam.
300 points, ended March 27, 2004, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Enjoyed this! Haikus are tough...and those who judge them even tougher!
Maureen
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Woohoo.... Andrew! Actually paying attention in class.
hehe.... I still need to make up my stuff.... Oh anyway.... Great ku you got here. Very whats that word... metphorical? hmm not sure what word I wanted to use. But its great! Good luck in the contest 
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It sort of has that metaphorical outlook to it. It weaves in one direction than in another. I don't know. A good piece that you have written here.
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This is very sad, although I do so enjoy the birds singing. Very nice job on this, good luck to you on the contest.
-MISTY- -
AH,
The orchard may be fruitless but it is sooo beautiful with bird's song...Aimee xo
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Very lovely indeed, kinda sad though, but it brought a smile to me.
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Yes Tina,it started off as the assignment, ( I've changed it a little, eight times so far lol) I hope you get over your lazy spell soon
After seening a preview of some of yours, it'll be nice for everyone to read them.
Andrew -
Andrew, this is flawless I think. Is it one you wrote for class? I have a ton I need to type up and add on here, when I get over my lazy spell
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Andrew.Excellent poem.I can see a small shivering song sparrow singing
Song sparrow
Sweetly singing sad song
Shivering
Well done.
Bill -
very good
An odd little bird left singing while all others have headed for warmer clime. And yet, in it's loneliness it has given another joy.
Beautifully written.
John -
Perhaps it's just because my apricot tree had burst out in bloom overnight (it seemed), but I could see the barren branches being kissed by Spring...accompanied by the melody of an array of birds. Beautiful picture of words.
m -
how depressing...is it spring yet? The thought of a bird's song upon the breeze reminds me that it is just around the corner though.
UB
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This is so beautiful. It seems sad at first, but then when you stop to think about it how can anyone be sad with the "bird song" echoing in their life. OK, so I know the answer to that... Even with my Joe singing to me, I still want children. Still dream of someday. Still cry at the thought that time is running out. Your poem made me think far too much for a sunday morning. Good work. Patti
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there's always the shop lol
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We can't have it all at one time )
Nevertheless I see the old knotty trees with at top these young twigs with almost bursting petals. Waiting for that extra spark as we did have last week and than those birds with the same hurry as what we want for spring.
Edited on Mar 21, 6:13 p.m. because ''.
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