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The countdown since summer--
where dreams were full of wonder
and nights were filled with pleasure.
Black Rose of lust and pain,
I beg you to stop!
You have no idea
how much you have hurt me...
will hurt me...
I'm filled with longing
for the past
for my life
which was stolen from me.
Beware, my love,
don't tread too near--
the Rose's thorns are sharp
and desire the blood of life.
I will drain you slowly,
and you'll look on in terror
forever trying to salvage
what you have lost.
Keep on! Keep on, my love!
I know it's hard
to drag free of the Rose's poison:
but isn't it worth the effort?
Escape while you can
before the thorns ensnare you once more
and drag you further down
in to the hole where I now reside.
I must seek solace from those around me
until that fateful day when I shed my mask,
and they run quickly from the truth
of my pained existence--
my reputation is stained
with pangs of regret and failure.
This is not what I wanted to be!
But no one saw me falling,
no one is helping me to my feet...
so here I stay
locked in a prison of my own making.
Summer seems so far away
as does love, my sweet love...
Will I ever taste it again?
Too many questions with no answers...
perhaps someday I will learn,
or maybe I'll continue to fall,
but for now the countdown begins anew
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Whatever..written awhile ago..found it in my journal..posted it..end of story..lol. It's crap..but who cares?
Written March 21st, 2004
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oh this was absolutely magical, i truely loved this... the counting at both ends really crowned on the poem...your style is effortless and i love it.. great write.. keep it up
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Its really good. But..um..can you explain some of it?
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It confuses you? Interesting..I would've thought you'd have gotten most of the references..or at least some of them..ask..and you shall know..heh. For this poem at least, I can tell you what it's about..all the hidden things in it..the ramblings of my mind. *sigh* I'm just gonna shut up now
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Hot Damn!!! Crap? This is great stuff, so very descriptive, and as you may know, I like description, a lot, so this scores high already. I like how this flits from thought to thought, it is very 'jumpy' you know? That is what I love about this, this is really just a collection of thoughts squished together, which has turned into this wonderfully descriptive poem.
Great Stuff, and I applaud you!
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ok im so confused by this poem ica. But i guess someday youwill explain things to me. no rush heh.
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