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Get a Life! :(

I write this muse with acumen
because I've not much time.
I just can't drop this goddam pen
addicted as I am to rhyme.
My doctor's on his way to me,
indubitably I need a shrink.
Into my head he needs to peer,
It's bloody hard to think!
He says it's probably the strife,
of all this crap I try to write,
and it's, nigh time I found a life!
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  • Judith Chandler
    October 7

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    I always enjoy poems about writing and this is a good one with its lively form and rhymes.

    Congrats on your silver trophy.


    • Ms-Mouse
      October 9
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      Thanks Judith, - I've been suffering from 'crappers write' lately, so not here much.


  • pixiestix gold member
    June 30

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    Yes, time we all found a life which would in my case give me even more experiences from which to write and just feeding the fire.

    Great incorporation of my favorite two words.

    Thanks for entering the contest.


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    June 30

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    We are all intitled to be a little crazy now and then....and what does that doctor know any way...Good luck

  • Yemassee gold member
    June 27

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    LOL, yeah most of us who spend any time at all on this site need to just get up and get a life, ah well.

    My shrink told me I was hopeless and was nuts. And I snuck a peek at his note pad and every line said, "This guy's crazy!"


    So basically I'm just enabling you with your obsession...cool!

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