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Lie Before Me

Lie softly now, before me,
and gently warm yourself
on the alter we created
with the flames of our passion.

Decorate the blemished walls of my heart
with the virtuous, healing silhouetts,
hung with divine prescence
upon the panels of your own.

Attach yourself firmly, and forever
to the sacred cord ,
dwelling in the focus of my mortality;
never releasing your grip,
allowing me to drift away.

Lend me your audacity to love,
and your inclination to forgive;
providing me finally
your aspiration of perfection.




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  • Angel-of-Chaos
    November 2

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    You melt my heart with your lovely words, so full of passion and truth. A passion and truth many have long been searching for.


  • amnouup
    October 20

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    Very passionate

    It ignites the fire of passion from the very first line, the way emotions are expressed with words sound like divine love, its a very soft and sublime poem that steals the heart of a reader.


  • Stirrer of Stardust
    October 10

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    I don't know what to say. Again, that's happening a LOT lately. Totally and completely awed.....

    Love & Blessings,

    ~ ~ Janet ~ ~


  • smitaanand
    October 10

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    You have talent that dazzles the mind glowing like the sun bright ,radiant,warm and luxiriantly vain with golden mane of imagination.This is so beautiful that rapture is running rampant in my mind painting rainbows on my soul's sublime walls.Thanks gad you shared...

  • Nameless-Faceless
    October 7

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    Absolutely stunning. Metaphor, imagery, symbolism. If you've never considered writing a play, please do so - you've got the subtlety - and yet, retain the ability to have powerful effect - to do so brilliantly.

    Great write.


  • Soft-Rain gold member
    September 11

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    Your quill is filled with such tenderness, the expressions here are soft and show the beauty of love.
    I can hear two meanings in this poem..smile.

    Perfectly penned,
    ~Lisa~


  • awannabepoet
    August 12

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    A beauty you have penned once again John, what a smooth and delicate pen you do have kind Sir.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • just2write silver member
    July 21

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    Oh, so romantic

    This is like fragrant whispers in the night. I was deeply touched by your gentleness and your beautiful words of love. It seems love is in the air today.
    If I were to change anything - it would be S1L4 - Change By to With.


    • John BoSox
      July 21
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      Thank you for your nice comments..I made the change..Thank you

      John


  • Daizee silver member
    June 27

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    You know how to melt hearts, don't you? The entire thing is soft and sensuous, but it was the first stanza that captured my heart.

  • seay49 gold member
    June 27

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    I like it!

    sometimes we desire someone and just have to find a way! your words describe this so well. you have a nice way with words and it makes this poem shine! -Jeff


  • sweet arrival gold member
    June 26

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    to have someone hold on so i wouldn't drift away... beautiful. already have the forgiveness down, at least some, but i am not searching for love anymore. i know he will show up when he is supposed to. thanks for the add


  • whitecoffee
    June 26

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    Another divine write. You're inspired today! The last lines to these stanzas are so strong..wonderful job!!!

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