This myriad hued skein of silk that binds us is fragile
Woven from ancient, divine words it may be
yet it could be broken by a wayward thought
Intricate tapestries depend on every thread
for the picture is not complete with one flaw
Each detail requires holographic universality
Opposition darkens the scene
brings the curtain down on unity
when it is born from inner distrust
For we only distrust another when we are not complete
and it consists of criticism or judgement
the slightest of which condemns ourselves
Spiritual laser entwines our eyes, melds as one
One mind, one thought, one direction
Imperfections in and doubt of others ceases
A contest entry
- Forgiving others and forgiving self by drifting cloud.
800 points, ended July 8, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow.. have you been watching LOST? A spledid display of philosophical ideal wrapped in poetry, I adore it and I'm transported. There's so much meaning in this.
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No, I don't watch Lost; perhaps I should? Thanks for your encouraging feedback!
Peace Georgia
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Usually, I can't stand lack of punctuation but it actually helps this without it. Each stanza literally flows with ease to the next, and I like how you've titled it too!
"For we only distrust another when we are not complete" -- I agree 100%.
Fantastic vocabulary, as usual. I didn't need the dictionary this time
Best of luck.
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'Spiritual laser entwines our eyes' - you have a gift for words. I see this as about not judging in the first place, seeing that no forgiveness is needed. When we complete our journey, we will indeed have changed.
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Georgia,
I love this one. Well written. Of course, yours is always well written. It the kind of poet you are. I love how you weave all this together that seemingly doesn't go together. Silk and tapestries and lasers mixed with forgiving others and yourself?
In the end... it all fits. Well done, poet, well done. Keep the ink flowing and good luck!
~Donna~
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