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Hottest summer ever

I tore rusty nail marks into your pale skin and i guess it never meant anything to you, but they matched the ones on my sweaty palms and on his face, where I made him bleed; but I could never hurt you.

Somedays I wish you really did exist, but like everything in life you had to be beautiful, and shallow, I guess I wouldn't of minded had it been the other way around.

Every crowded room I look for someone a little like you, but no-one finds a flaw enticing and with that loneliness only came despair, our friends always said what we meant for us, but i guess you were always told a different story.

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  • Nicely written. Reads deepish and personal. Be Well


  • Kari gold member
    June 26
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    This was really deep, and the imagery was great.