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Harmony

 

thoughts walk

within ebb and flow

where slivers age

in morning glow

 

calm bathes

where ocean and sand

gather silent

offerings;

 

ocean and sand bathe

thoughts that ebb and flow

aged as silent slivers

within morning's offering



 

Author notes

A 'finclo' poem - developed this form some time ago.

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  • malmadre gold member
    June 29

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    The verses are in harmony as I see a blending of the wording throughout, it comes full circle, a gentle ebb and flow. A wonderful entry that carries a soothing message. It's good!


    • FransB gold member
      July 1
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      Thank you

      for a challenging contest; the winners well-chosen. I appreciate your comments, they are most encouraging. Blessings. Frans


  • Peteskid gold member
    June 27

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    such an interesting form, subtle shifts of words to make new meanings and ideas, a very fine poem blending thoughts, nature and time...remarkable...PK


    • FransB gold member
      July 1
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      Thank you PK

      I appreciate your comments, and time taken to do so. Frans