Clouds repent
of coy withholding
confessing
sultry deluge
but what
will quench
this God-sized
hollow?
Author notes
Prompt: All I need See contest pic
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- all I need by Lavender Butterfly.
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yes, some things are beyond knowledge but not beyond curiosity, a black hole where we imagine everything, even time, becomes impossibly small...God sized indeed...PK
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Yes, I like the way you looked at this. Time becoming smaller... not exactly the feeling you want when there's a hollow to fill. Or... perhaps so... if it creates a sense of urgency... not anxiety, but urgency.
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well, I saw a sci-fi once and there was this galaxy inside a marble, the idea of a huge dimension being incredibly small in size... we have so many preconceptions, when the most powerful things in existence may be indeed incredibly small in size... anyway...you made me think...a dangerous thing to do
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LOL, ah, an interesting concept! On so many fronts, perspective is everything!
A dangerous thing?
Wells, I don't mind living on the edge,
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More rain!
Wow, that was a really simple answer, I wonder how I came up with it?
Probably a deluge of one kind or another is the answer to most things spiritual and earthly. Or some I just made up.
It's hard to feel things when that hollow has been dug, no matter how much rain attempts to fill it.
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Yep, Yem. I think the answers to the most complex issues of life are so simple that we are blind to them, 'cause we're to busy looking for something else and forget to truly pay attention.
Thanks so much for reading and leaving your sillies and your smarts here.
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Outstanding write. Extensive content in small word count. Brilliant "repent of coy withholding." Gentle prod to confess love, and acknowlege it's bountiful presentations.
Brilliant concluding stanza. Indeed, that space can be a black hole, or become a seat of glory. And we get to choose...
Loved this!
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misconception
I have never felt lonley with 'me'...I only feel lonely, while with others & being ignored or shunned. -
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fair enough
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ahhh, a quiet place
Some say, the emptiness within, is shaped like God & only God can fill the void.
I certainly cannot.
Sometimes, i' go there, to hide from the pain out there.
Others choose to fill it with furniture, tears and things.
I have made emptiness, my friend.
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Quiet, I guess, but sounds lonely, D.
Thanks so much for leaving your thoughts.
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Oh this is a very, very deep and intense write on the picture. You really dug so deep here!
Best wishes with this. It's brilliant, as always 
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Thanks so much, Gaylene. I think we all come to discover that hollow eventually in our life, if we will allow ourselves to recognize it. Of the boy in the pic, I was thinking how vast was the field, the life, before him. How it would rain and rain and the field would always drink every drop and want for more. He seems so tender there with his little stuffed toy. I thought about how he would grow and how experiences might change his perspective... cause him to seek something that perhaps he understood as a child as he watched the earth be filled. I'd like to come back and work on this one. We'll see.
Thank you, as always, for your sweet and generous comments.
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such depth in brevity here... x
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Wow that brevity says a whole lot C
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