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Scarred

The lies you told rest
rest upon my battered chest
before they start burning
burning their way through
Burrowing ever so deep
deep into where my heart used to lay
silently ever so gently wrapping
wrapping their chains around
around the virgin heart
now that's left is the emptiness
emptiness left because of you
This I did not feel at first
first when the lies were told
Not from our lips but from our hearts
hearts that were deceived by that hint of love
No, first you had me believe
believe that we had something
something very special
special, perhaps it was at one time
time has passed long from there
where we used to be
love lingered in the air
air as the scent of something precious
but it all turned dark
dark forever fading to black
black as the night
nights turned to days as we hoped
hoped for something to rekindle
rekindle what we had
never letting I be good enough
enough for your family or friends
worst of all finding myself
myself not good enough for you
you who wouldn't even give it a chance.
but alas we were never meant to be
the lies we believed
believed now lay dead at our feet
Feet covered in the Gray ash of our friendship
friendship that lingered for far too long
longer than healthy for both of us to move on

Author notes

This is the first part of a poem that I wrote for the contest... the first part i submit here, the second part i will submit onto my own site as 'scars to hope' and post the rest of the poem there... I wanted to kind of have a beat to the words not sure if it turned out quite like I visioned but it didn't turn out half bad.

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  • Emerald Rain
    June 27

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    you know I can totaly relate to this poem. It sounds a lot like what I went through not to long ago. you have dipicted what I"m looking for gracfully. thank you for entering.